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March 29, 2014, 9:03 am

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Onyx Guardians


Atop a nearby rise the infuriated priestess stood, taking in the unfolding scene in the

valley below. How dare these metallic, roaring, foreigners loot their temples. She offered

up a silent, vengeful prayer to her gods, may their wrath befall these intruders!

It is mid afternoon and the characters are relaxing and taking a well deserved rest from

their latest successful venture.

A pirate ship docks in town, laden with treasure and coin. The sailors begin their

carousing; paying with gold coins from some country that no one has ever heard of. They

also sell off small, strange statuettes crafted from onyx, giving one to the characters as

payment or a gift.

However, over the course of a few days the sailors seem in a panic and attempt to get

back all of the statuettes from everyone they had given them to.

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May 28, 2013, 9:49
Feels like I'm repeating myself, it's a good plot but I would have wanted to see more.
May 30, 2013, 18:49
Kassy, just had an idea that floated into my head on this sub. I think what you've written so far would make a great start to the Tales of Adventure format. All you need to do now is to add the 3 possibilities on why the sailors are in a panic to get the figurines back.
May 31, 2013, 6:53
It was pitch black and I was eaten by a Grue.

Would that be enough to expand it into a full sub?
May 31, 2013, 7:10
I probably got the sub name wrong, it was a Codex by Wulfhere if I remember correctly. Okay, I just did a search, the Codex is actually called Tales of the Road (Tales of Adventure is the format and I got mixed up). 

Well, usually the three scenarios will make the sub into a sufficient length since each will be an independent scenario on its own. While it is clear from your summary that these figurines came from a looted temple, I can't, for the life of me, guess the motivations for these pirates wanting the figurines back based on what was written down here so far (well, not 100% true, prob a curse or sth, but still no idea at all abt nature of the curse since you can take it so many ways) 

And I just had more thoughts on turning this into a Tale of the Road. I know this is for the world you're building and you've revealed the cause of the curse but was thinking that as it currently stands, it doesn't explicitly says that the pirates were the ones looted the temple (although very likely that it's them) so was thinking in your 3 scenarios, could possibly include whether they were the culprits and if not, how they came into contact with the culprits. 

Voted caesar193
May 31, 2013, 15:10

Good sub. You tell everything, and hint at what is to come. Is telling the cause in the summary cheating?
March 29, 2014, 9:03
Update: Sub re-upload. Was lost to the void.
Voted axlerowes
April 1, 2014, 12:10
For a 100 word challenge you wasted your first sentence.

There is an idea here that I would like to see expanded upon; spelling and grammar are passable.
April 2, 2014, 11:18
Agreed. At the time however these were just to get me back into writing. If you want to add ideas to it, feel free.

January 15, 2015, 10:17
3.5 another pretty good adventure hook,but I'm out of votes

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Voted valadaar
February 7, 2017, 10:59
This is a great plot idea. Love it is not the PCs problem to start with...

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       By: Incarnadine

Stormbound, the ship rolls hard over to once side. All that is not strapped down is tossed violently overboard in a splash of freezing water.

There, on the horizon- a tower. Squat, it stands alone on a tiny island. However, it's the only land in sight, and any more of this ferocious storm will crush the boat to splinters.

Taking shelter within the ornate entryway of the squat tor, the party notes with interest that no signs of life break the silence of the stone tower. As they take another step forward, they realise why.


This is the fabled tower of Brenji, a rich merchant who wished none to share his enormous wealth. He constructed this tower to store his gold- trapped and ready for any potential thieves. But the ingenious pitfalls and scything walls are not the only dangers within the silent walls of the building. A guardian, left behind by Brenji, still stalks these very halls.

A rattling hiss echoes somewhere from below...

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