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Ocadian PitFiend


Ephemeralstability wrote:
The ochre sands stretch for miles around. Something kicks up the dust. It’s a yak. A desert-yak. It ambles slowly, nuzzling the ground for the low-growing shrubs. The ranger freezes. “Stay very still,” he warns. “Don’t move at all.” “What is it?” you ask, breathlessly. “It’s the most dangerous creature in the whole Ocadian desert. And it’s about to eat that yak…”

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The Ocadian PitFiend is a colony creature, where several different lifeforms combine together.

1) On the surface there are what appears to be shrubs. They are actually two different plants living together. One is Brycanthis, which produces a low woody shrub, the other Sochrin Vines, primitive relatives to Treller Vines. Combined, they make a low woody shrub with green leaves and small red flowers. Neither of these plants should be able to survive in this environment due to soil and water requirements, but as part of the colony, they can.

2) Deeply, there is Ocadian Fungi. The giant subsand relatives to the mushshooms can grow to huge sizes, encompassing several acres underground. They are just under the heat level (where the sun’s warmth no longer warms the sand/ soil). They provide liquid and stability for the PitFiend.

3) In the Middle combines three creatures. Ocadian SandCoral (or a variation of) is the backbone of the creature. These small creatures eat organics in the sand, protecting themselves from heat and predators by creating small shells of silicon… thus creating a coral. They create the stable foundation for the plants to root to and the Pitfiend to grow from. It is unclear if it is two or three kinds of microplants that make up the Fiend Proper. One plant produces “spoors” that stun and can immobilize creatures once stimulated (stepped on or agitated by chemical signals produced by the bush plants being disturbed). In addition the spoors begin the digestive properties. They grow on the surface out of the SandCoral. The colonies of Sand Anemones will shoot their “once in a life cycle” tentacle… drawing the creature into the pit. (they will then reproduce, drawing upon nutrients from the caustic goo inside the bulb). Inside the bulb of the fiend (held together by coral and the plant roots) is a number of microplants and animals that digest flesh quickly and even can break down bone and metals. The goo inside the bulb can completely digest a human in about four hours, passing nutrients and water out of the bulb to the rest of the colony. In fact they are so acidic that they must remove the water quickly less it becomes so unacidic that they die. One of the microcolonies of the goo does nothing but that.

The Yak was attracted to really nice looking plants that should not be able to survive here in the desert. It seems to act drunk, unsteady. It is slowed and stunned by breathing in spoors. Then tentacles shoot out, drawing its prey underground. If small enough, it disappears completely under the sand… but the Yak is too big, it appears to slowly sink into the sand among the nice bushy plants. 

Even if you rescue someone from the bulb, part of their body will be dissolved and will be infected by a number of microbes that will continue to try and digest the victim. Even being near the plant is dangerous, as inhalation of the spoors will lead to tiredness, fatigue, paralysis, and begin to break down the lungs and wet tissues they touched, causing bleeding from the eyes, nose, and lung… as they are slowly digested by the spoors.

In fact, the rizone (mushroom) element counts on things getting away… they will then decompose and feed both it and the PitFiend.

Spoors will be an issue for people, but by the time people realize someone has been infected, not only have all of you have been effected, but much damage has already been done. The PitFiend wound (swallowed) can be stopped by the “Old Ranger Trick” of swabbing the wound with a honey and water mixture. Magic can resolve some of it, but there will be 1-6 “diseases”/ parasites that will need to be removed (thus 1-6 spells of removal). Also one of the microflora put out a strong anti-magic field (for a microanimal) so it is difficult to resolve anyways. After all, it is the most dangerous creature in the desert. It can kill from a distance, it can kill you if you escape, and it will make you “gone” if you stray near it.

Additional Information
The only thing that gives this creature away are the innocent shrubs that are somewhat out of place and the caustic smell that bubbles up if it is digesting something.

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Voted Cheka Man
November 3, 2005, 20:43
A truely nasty plant, very well described. Worthy of a 5/5.
Voted Zylithan
November 14, 2005, 0:37
I really like how you mix in story-telling with this post, and I like the details and complexity.
Voted Ancient Gamer
November 14, 2005, 11:18
I like it! It is a very good post and a solid life form.
February 25, 2006, 10:57
Updated: updated for a couple of spelling erros
Voted Murometz
February 25, 2006, 23:45
Great read! An insidious life-form. I feel for that Yak
February 26, 2006, 0:25
It is also dangerous to be down wind or in the immediate area when a kill is taking place (spoors). That is why our desert ranger in the example calls a 'stop' to his party. Nobody should be close to a pitfiend when it strikes, just in case.
Voted Scrasamax
March 28, 2007, 15:04
Somewhere there is a market for the bulbs of a pitfiend slathered in butter and simmered with red wine.
Voted Incarnadine
March 28, 2007, 18:43
That was pretty cool, actually. I do like the idea of carnivorous colonies- just the kind of thing you need to add a bit of science, weirdness, and danger to a world.

Wouldn't a desert yak know to avoid them, though? I mean, an animal that lives in one place all its life will usually know the dangers of its surroundings...
March 29, 2007, 13:41
Have you ever watched a nature special on The Yak? They are not the brightest creature in the world.

Yes, most animals should know enough to avoid a predator. But like Humans they go, "Hmm it looks safe. It probably isn't a predator this time...."
March 29, 2007, 14:56
Makes sense. Probably why 'yak really isn't synonymous with 'bright'...

Plus it'd be a bit boring if all it ate was unwary travelers.
Voted Wulfhere
March 29, 2007, 17:11
An interesting symbiotic lifeform, well described and detailed. The thorough description lends authenticity: It reminds me of some of the science fiction creatures I've seen.
March 30, 2007, 12:54
Science fiction animals, generally, need to be based in "reality". Even the fantastical ones, need some grounding in reality (or something resembling). You don't get the convient hand wave of "its a magical creature". Since this isnot a magical creature, I don't get the hand wave, so it needs biology and ecology.

Even magical creature should be embedded into the ecology. They impact their world and their world impacts them. This has a good "trapper" element of the ecology, including the results of exposure. Logical extensions of attacks and a creature designed to take care of them are good details to include.

I like animals that have deep analogs with real animals. This colony is a combination of three animals/ colonies/ plants. The combination of these creatures is what makes it fantastical (and scary).
Cheka Man
October 29, 2008, 21:26
Not a plant to grow in your garden.
Cheka Man
June 15, 2010, 11:05
Too dangerous for a zoo.
Voted valadaar
March 16, 2016, 13:51
This is quite the creature - it reminds me of the Portuguese man o' war which is a colony of creatures rather then a single creature.

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