Serenity Cove
Serenity Cove is a picturesque coastal town once thriving and prosperous. Now finds that it is in the grips of a terrible evil.
Serenity Cove is a beautiful coastal town with a thriving trading port. Rolling hills and vistas to the east surrounds one section of the town. To the west lies a huge mountain range. Serenity Cove is populated with about 570 hardworking people, who are farmers, artisans and miners. You have some blacksmiths there is great prosperity in the town. There is a well-kept inn where you can get a room for the night. The local tavern is also good place to get a pint of ale and a good cooked meal. There is even a big festival during the summer season. During this, time people come from all over to sell their wares at the festival. The tavern and the inn are packed while the festival is taking place. For generations the little town of Serenity Cove prospered and life was good.
Crime was never a big concern in Serenity Cove, but some how while the good town folk wasn't looking a sinister element had wormed its way into their midst. Now wickedness was slowing making its presence known. In the past, you might see a gent that had had bit too much ale staggering along or leaning against a wall to get his balance. You would help him home or to the local inn and get him squared away or a kid might take an apple from the fruit stand and someone would toss the owner a coin and everybody would be happy. Things have gotten so bad that now if you were to someone leaning against a wall or lying in an alleyway chances are his throat had been cut. The ladies in town were afraid the venture out alone even in the daylight hours for fear of having their purse snatched or worse. There was a savagery to the crimes that were taking place in Serenity Cove. Just when did the town turn bad you ask? Some will say its been going that way for a long time. Others will say that I happened over night. Nobody really knew what was happening. All anyone knew was that the criminals reveling in the terror that they were unleashing on the town folk. The constabulary was powerless to stop what was happening and the citizens were frozen with fear.
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This could have potential but at the moment I think it's fairly dire. You need to flesh out a lot of things: firstly, what is there about Serenity Cove which makes it different from any other coastal town? In short, why do we care about it. Secondly, you need to tell us about this wickedness and what is causing: make it real, make it interesting. Admittedly, the players might not need to know any more than you've written, but we do.
Also, there are a few things that don't mesh. Firstly, if there is a thriving port, 570 people seems quite small (my village is 4 times that size (admittedly a different era). Especially if a lot of them are also farmers, artisans and miners. Also, 570 people is a bit small for large scale crime waves: if 20-30 people are killed (which seems to be the minimum the way I read it), that is 5% of the population!
As I say, there is some potential so 2/5.
Thanks for the feedback. I will back and beef it up a bit.
I agree, the biggest thing lacking is the why. There are infinite reasons why it could be happening but with this you have to tell us your angle on it. This would probably be a great thread for the Flesh it Out forum where you would probably get some pretty different ideas on why.
Thanks for the feedback. I will back and beef it up a bit.
You doubled your comment there, bud.
I got nothing to say that they haven't said. I'm gonna go ahead and bump it up to a 3 though, just for ha-ha's.
3/5.
I dunno. The lack of a why ads to the mystery. Maybe a band of PC's passing through will discover the cause behind this calamity,
Terse, but an interesting hook.
The tone is a bit irregular, the first paragraph shifting from academic to informal, then entirely colloquial in the second paragraph. I like the colloquial bit, actually, but I wonder if it would be better served set off as a quote. That could just be my personal tastes, though.
A lot more could be said to illustrate the prosperity the town once had. I'm fine with the mystery of its sudden downturn, but it would be nice to have more explained on either side of the decline just to demonstrate it more.