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October 28, 2005, 4:54 am

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The Murdered Young


The Murdered Young are the vengeful ghosts of infants who died before they were baptized.

Category: Haunting Undead
Danger rating: Nuisance
Activity Period: Nighttime
Restrictions: Cannot leave site of death
Description: The Murdered Young are the vengeful ghosts of infants who died before they were baptized. Telltale sounds can often be heard when a Murdered Young is nearby, depending on its age when it died. If it was the victim of an abortion, the sounds of a throbbing heart would be most likely, and if it was an infant the sound would be that of a crying baby. On occasion the Murdered Young screams with a childish voice, and then it usually scream the name of its murderer and how it was killed. Murdered Young appears as luminous wafts of fog, but might leave dripping wet baby footprints. If inspected, the fluid will appear to be amniotic fluid (the water surrounding a fetus).

These ghosts never attack anyone, but can prove quite bothersome as they are known to haunt the site of their death. They cannot be exorcised and only disappear when their murderer dies, which has resulted in many a burning of supposedly child murdering females. A Murdered Young will make all females in its vicinity barren until they leave the area or the haunting has ceased. Additionally it will instill fear in those who encounter or hear it, and will make sleep difficult as they keep people awake and cause nightmares.

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Voted Strolen
November 7, 2005, 13:30
Goog gosh AG. Footprints of amniotic fluid. :)

A good idea for an unusual ghost!
Voted Roack
November 9, 2005, 17:54
I like it, but, I'm not so sure about the screaming of death/muderer. It could use a bit of refining, but otherwise: BRILLIANT (as usual)
Voted Zylithan
November 20, 2005, 11:19
it's short, but it sure does paint a vivid picture.
Ancient Gamer
December 5, 2005, 11:16
I ought to mention this: I created this lifeform based on the superstition of the norwegian population during the 13th, 14th and 15th century.

This belief cost dozens of women their life in those days.
Voted Murometz
June 5, 2007, 17:23
Footprints of amniotic fluid Nice!!

this begs to be used.
Voted manfred
June 5, 2007, 18:12
Nothing wrong with this one, but I must admit The Crying Ones are a better take on the theme. Kudos for that fluid bit, and the historical background mentioned.
Ancient Gamer
October 8, 2007, 0:40
It was created a short while before the Crying Ones, and I agree, the Crying Ones are better. I don't know if I was the inspiration, but the resemblance and timing makes me think so. If so it shows how great the Citadel is when people build upon other peoples' work, refining and getting inspired in the process.
Voted valadaar
May 9, 2012, 13:41
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