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November 22, 2005, 9:17 pm

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Lady Nadia

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Nadia, a sixteen year-old noble lady, is put up to the challenge of surviving when her panpered lifestyle is abrubtly shattered.

Special Equipment:

A wide range of potions and poisons, as well as a few expensive protection amulets. Her prized posseson is a silver ring given to her by her mother. the ring has a tiny opal in the center that glows red when someone is lying.

Appearance:

Nadia is sixteen years old, 5’2’‘, and has waist-length red hair and green eyes. She has no combat skills whatsoever, and largely depends on poison to get her out of tough spots. although her wealth and power is gone,she still feels soupierior to those around her. To everyone else, she seems unbearably snotty.

Background:

Lady Nadia was once a pampered Duke’s daughter, wanting for nothing in her pampered lifestyle. Her happy life was shattered when her father was accused and convicted of treason. When royal guards came to take the family away, Nadia was the only one to escape.

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Scrasamax
August 1, 2004, 1:13
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If this was fishing, I would say you forgot to put some bait on your hook. Nadia seems to have some potential, but it is unrealized.

Nadia's father was accused of treason. Was he guilty? What were the details of the treason? Another note, how did Nadia escape the Royal guard when everyone else was captured?

There could also be more detail in the ring. Where did her mother acquire it, was it a gift, or was it commisioned, or a family heirloom?

Nadia has a supply of potions and poisons, how does she carry them? A secret pouch, or a padded jewelry box perhaps? How much has she used poison? Does she make it herself, or does she buy it?

Last point here. If Nadia is unbearable and snotty, why would anyone be interesting in helping her, let alone spend any time around her?

2/5
CaptainPenguin
August 1, 2004, 17:06
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Ditto to what Scras said.

This character has little backstory, relatively no fleshing-out.
How does she depend on her poisons to get her out of tough spots? It was my belief that poisons must be ingested or breathed in. How does she fight with poison? Splash it in the enemy's face?
Why is she so good with poisons?
Needs work.

2/5.
EchoMirage
August 3, 2004, 10:29
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Yup. 2/5
Voted Silveressa
February 9, 2011, 9:16
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She had potential, alas it was never realized...

Voted valadaar
April 25, 2013, 8:38
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Agree with the comments on this sub. A start.

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