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The Staff of Undoing


A spear that could undo the enemy, or undo the beholder…

Once upon a time a child was running and playing through the field. He was a young boy with golden hair that swept along his head as he ran. Always out adventuring, looking for new things, the boy was quite active. Even though, he still was a child.

As he ran through the waist high grass that felt like silk against his skin, he tripped over a piece of wood. He landed gently in the grass, the tall blades falling to either side to cushion the blow. After coming to his senses he sat up and turned to look at what he had tripped over. There he saw a brown, crudely crafted piece of wood. It was quite rough looking and not at all decorative.

That was all he saw before he edged closer to it and pushed the other blades of grass aside. At one end it rounded off in a quickly and not truly caring cut fashion, and on the other end there was strapped to the wood, as well as lodged into the center of it, a blade. Around the actual strong and tightly wound fabric that strapped it in, were tied ribbons of cloth dyed red. The cloth extended on one side, all six strands of it to one side, and extended about two feet. The blade itself was crude, and it didn’t seem to be very straight, but rather jagged. The wood itself wasn’t entirely straight either, and seemed to be nearly a branch cut at both ends.

This sight astounded the child, as though he had discovered the most precious item in all the world. His eyes widened as he gripped his slender fingers around the wood. His fingers barely touched around the spear’s shaft.

In an astounded nature and filled with glory he lifted the heavy thing over his head just barely and yelled out,
“The Staff of Undoing!”
Even though it wasn’t truly a staff, it’s what his heart shouted from deep inside.

Just then in all the passion of the moment, the wind began to whip around violently. The sky darkened just slightly and he gripped onto the spear, which the top end was against the ground since the crudely fashioned blade was designed poorly and was thus heavy.  He felt as though this would protect him.

A spirit of the wind had come and wanted to test this boy of his sudden inspiration. The wind howled around the boy,
“The spear is mine!”
And it whirled around him, trying to rip the spear from his hands. The boy held onto it tightly and yelled,
“No, it’s mine! I found it!”
The wind whirled about in ways to try and take it from his grip, but just fell the boy to the ground, still clutching the staff. After rolling around among the grass and not giving up on his “Staff of Undoing” the wind came to a gentle breeze…

All that the wind said before dissipating away was,

“Be wary, storms don’t last forever.”

As he continued to grip the staff, he felt a burst of energy rush inside of him. He wanted to tell his mama and papa about what had happened. So then, he rushed home, running through the grass at a great speed, holding the staff as though it were as light as air. It felt that way, and he felt energized in a way.

Though, as he kept running he felt the energy slip away. The staff still felt as light as air but his energy was quickly slipping away. He had dashed quite a bit, and the grass was shorter here. He stopped for a rest and layed down, holding the staff…He was weary, and held it in one of his hands. As he drifted off, though, his energy kept falling away. Finally, though, his fingers stopped gripping and the spear fell to the side. His body stopped losing energy, but it was tired and it rested deeply throughout the day.

He awoke in the night, and immediately he gripped the staff. He felt energized again and wanted to be home direly before he got in trouble.  He sprinted and went as much as he could. Then, his energy failed him again, for he didn’t realize he’d gone so far this time. He kept trudging, even though his body was failing him. In his last bit, he collapsed to the ground, the staff in his arms, and he thought to himself,

“I’ll just rest here, with my staff…”

He was asleep before he hit the ground, and as he slept, his heart slowly slowed, then finally stopped. The boy died, and no one found him…

The spirit found the spear, later, and inscribed along its shaft, “The Staff of Undoing.” The staff lay in the field, resting and forever guarding its ever faithful owner…

Magical Properties:

The spear when held gives the owner a burst of energy that doesn’t last very long. After that the spear continues to drain the beholder’s energy until the spear is let go entirely. The effect works through clothing.
The spear feels as light as air, and is quite easy to wield, no matter how weary the user is.
Be wary of using it in battle, for it must be let go and can not be sheathed. It could be picked up by anyone nearby. Also don’t attempt to use it until one passes out, which could often lead to death. If you can’t make a kill, then the suggestion is to run, since the energy is temporary and will give them great speed.
For it’s design and the way it was made, it is incredibly hard to break. It can be broken, and isn’t any more indestructible than it would be.
The ratio of resting time, to time running with the energy would about equal out to quicker than the time of someone walking. Advisable to rest as soon as the energy goes away.

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July 20, 2003, 13:35
I like the way you presented it, but what the hell is a "Tribal Kaiser"?
July 20, 2003, 13:50
Hmmm....Merriam-Webster defines it as:
Tribal: Of or relating to tribes or tribal groups
Kaiser: German corruption of Caesar. Takes on the meaning "emperor"

So a "Tribal Kaiser" would be a the emperor of the tribe.
Barbarian Horde
July 20, 2003, 15:16
...No...Actually a Kaiser is a bladed staff...It's like a spear, except with a one sided blade at the end...Did you look at all of the definitions of Kaiser?
July 20, 2003, 15:45
It had only one definition of kaiser.

That still doesn't explain to me why it's "tribal". I saw nothing in there to indicate "tribal-ness" except for the description "Tribal Kaiser".
July 21, 2003, 14:13
Well actually you didn't imagine it well.
Crudely cut branch, latched with a crude blade. Where the blade is latched there are six cloth ribbons coming out. I imagine it as being Tribal, entirely. I guess you couldn't find Kaiser. Sort of how I couldn't find Wakizashi.
July 21, 2003, 14:34
The wakizashi is a short, knife-like blade used in combination with a katana by Japanese samurai.

Just because it's crude doesn't mean it's tribal. Not all tribal things are crude!
July 21, 2003, 16:13
But the ribbons. Imagine what it would look like. It would look Tribal. It's origin is of a tribe, but that has no matter...Hm...I guess it's getting low ratings because people don't really like it...
A Wakizashi isn't knife like, it's only ten inches shorter than the Katana. It's short sword like, about. The Tanto is knife like.
July 21, 2003, 16:17
Ah, but a Katana isn't as long as most people make it out to be. A Katana is only slightly longer than a short sword. The really long swords are called o-katanas or daitos (But NEVER dai-katana.).
July 21, 2003, 16:22
Bah! Forget it! All we're arguing about is wether or not it's "tribal"! Hey, I've forgoten to give my rating...
July 21, 2003, 19:34
Thanks for your rating man, it jumped it up another flame. You like it...You really like it...~Sniffles with a smile~
Even so, a wakizashi is only ten inches shorter than a katana. It's really not "knife like".
July 21, 2003, 20:26
Fine, if you like. Just don't let me catch you calling a daito or o-katana a "dai-katana"!
Voted Cheka Man
January 29, 2006, 12:58
Nice.A spear that drains the energy of the holder.Very useful until you pass out in the middle of the battle and get trampled.I feel sorry for the boy.I wonder why he was not found. If the spear is taken from his skeliton, does his spirit rise?
Voted valadaar
February 5, 2014, 14:50
Decent writing, idea is somewhat unclear, and Why is not answered at all. Where did it come from?

Voted Dozus
February 5, 2014, 15:16
Hm. The story is interesting. Can't say it's my cup of tea, but it's interesting.

The why and how of it isn't explained. Did this kid just will a weird stick to become a magic spear? And the magic properties are a little wordy in their explanation.

It's got potential, I reckon. But as is, it doesn't do much for me.
Voted Murometz
January 13, 2015, 23:22
Nice chrome, but needs more 'splainin as others have said.

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Only deadly weapons allowed

       By: Cheka Man

A certain country allows most civilians to carry weapons, but only if they are potentially deadly. Pepper sprays, stun guns/tasers, batons, and dart guns are banned. And if you kill someone and are not acquitted at trial, the punishment is to be hanged the day after you were found guilty. The message here is that if you want to go armed, you had better be prepared to risk killing someone and being executed unless it was clearly self defense.

When it comes to combat spells, again, only the highly dangerous can legally be cast with the same possible consequences if cast wrongly.

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