Author's Notes: I don't care if you want to adapt this for your games but don't use the same character names in this sub. I'm working towards indie publishing this current novel series that I'm working on and I don't want to run into plagiarism accusations.
Sin is 16 and very ordinary looking- medium height and weight, neither beautiful nor ugly. She appears rather subdued but at the same time holds herself with grace. She seldom smiles but when she does, her smile imparts warmth.
In the eyes of a random woman within Sin’s clan:
The general consensus among these clan women is that Sin has little to commend herself in terms of being a wife other than the fact that she is daughter to the clan leader. They think that Sin sets her sights rather above her calling in life and even though she is still competent in many of the tasks central to running a family, this tendency prevents her from excelling at them. Not to mention that they doubt Sin would take second position to her future husband-to-be or mother-in-law.
In the eyes of members of her forage party:
Sin is a capable leader and if truth be told, they were all a little afraid of her. Well, maybe afraid is not quite the right word. But she is odd, not like them at all and not like their mothers either. They had all been warned to stay away from Sin by their mothers and actually they needn’t have been bothered at all. Sin had never wanted to be associated with them at all, not even when they were little.
In the eyes of her father:
Yin doesn’t quite know what to do about her daughter Sin. He knew that she, in her own way, resists him (had been resisting him ever since her mother passed away), even though she is a dutiful daughter and takes care of all the house chores. Then again, he doesn’t have much time to deal with his daughters’ problems, given all the clan businesses that he needs to take care of on a daily basis. If only he has more time…
In the eyes of Dip, her younger sister:
Dip loves her big sister Sin, just as Sin clearly loves her. Sin not only cares for her on a day-to-day basis but actually appeases her little whims, which more than what her other friends get. She is so lucky to have Sin as her big sister.
In the eyes of Lum, her cousin:
When did my feelings towards Sin change? I don’t really know myself. For the longest time, I just thought of her as a younger sister and then… I found myself staying awake at night thinking of her smile. She doesn’t just smile for anyone but she does for me. And whenever she smiles, I feel warm all over… I feel complete like I don’t normally do. But do I deserve her?
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What sort of feedback are you looking for with Sin Sin
I'm not particularly looking for feedback on her, she doesn't need further fleshing out according to me or my purpose. This is just material generated when I want to get deeper into her as a character and I'm throwing this up because I want to make the tiniest movement towards reclaiming the level I lost :) So just throw up whatever thoughts you have about her or ask questions if there are aspects about her not covered in this post.
My question is, is there more? She seems a tad bland. But then again, I have no idea what’s in the works for her.
Yes, there's going to be a whole series where she and another guy is going to be the protagonists. The main thing that happens to her in book 1 is that her younger sister gets lost and she sets out to find her in a massive system of underground caves underneath the fictional equivalent of Himalayas. Then she meets this other guy that co-runs the story with her. This is basically a writing exercise I did on Sin Sin cos I felt like I couldn't really get into her. She is pretty bland if you take her into a game unless the campaign was about her quest for her younger sister. And that's what book 1 is about for her so in that sense, that is THE CAMPAIGN for my purposes.