Shadows Revenge
This cloak is a thiefs best friend, especially when he has the other 2 pieces of the collection, for it gives the wearer supernatural bonuses to sneaking and hiding.
This looks to be a normal black cloak.
This hooded cloak would be a very valued item among thiefs, if they could find it. It once belonged to a thief who tried to sneak into the underdark and steal from a matron mother of a drow house. When he was caught he was stripped of his belongings and tortured in a drow dungeon, he may still be down there. A drow male, who first saw the thief and took the cloak for his own, lost the cloak on an unsuccessful surface raid, to kill a group of surface elves. It is said to still be lost somewhere but no one knows where.
Magical Properties:
+30 to hide
+10 to move silently
+2 to Devterity while the owner wears the cloak
The wearer can hide in plain site without the need of shadows (see the Dungeon Masters Guide for D&D: Prestige class Shadow Dancer)
The owner must be of an evil alignment to wear this cloak or he/she suffers a loss of 2 levels, which cannot be undone untill he/she takes off the cloak.
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? Responses (6)
Quite a simple item, and cloaks of hiding are fairly common, unless Im mistaken. Though, if this were given a good background and a more in-depth description I think it could do well. One thing, however - posts in the citadel are supposed to be non-system, so people can adapt it to whatever they wish. please keep it in mind in the future :)
Don't be discouraged, however - keep trying, and im sure you'll make some great items before long. Perhaps looking at some of our 5-rated items will give an idea on the depth and detail needed to get a good mark.
2/5
Eins: WE AREN'T D&D! No D&D, Nairo. Actually describe what it does instead of giving us some canned statistics that really mean nothing.
Zwei: Boring background. Boring boring background. By the way, why is it called 'Shadow's Revenge'?
2/5.
'cause the name is 'kewl' I guess - why aint there any 'Full Plate of Standing out Slightly Less'? why is always a cloak good for hiding?
In Baldur's Gate, there were 3 cloaks of Various Degree of Hiding. And they too were no that original.
And yes, I strongly dislike DnD - not that it affects my rating of this item the least...
but according to 3rd ed, it is TERRIBLY overpowered.
See above, but witout the multiple personalities.
It has the beginning of a story, but needs more detail, like why was he stealing from a matron mother of a drow house? Was he just stupid? How did this cloak come into being anyway?
1/5
The item is not only overpowered (+30 on hide means most monsters will need to roll 20 on a D20 to see you), but it also is quite useless in most campaings, since you need to be of evil allignment to use the cloak.
Yours,
Ylorea