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Special Equipment:
Gladius Armor-
Protection against elements, the only person that may see the armor is the owner.
Appearance:
This Character has a bad attitude about things, but he knows what he is doing.
He dresses in what ever he can find. The only thing that he actually cleans and washes daily is his Gladius Armor.
Background:
He was born half Human and Half Elf. His mother was killed by his father and his father banished Didget away, for his mother cheated on his father. He for his whole life had to live in the wilderness. When he was 15 he was brought the Gladius Armor from a forrest mage, it would protect him from the creatures elements and he could hunt them down to eat easily. But he has forgot who his mother was, and forgot what was in the outside world.
Roleplaying Notes:
This character plans on leaving the forest to see the outside world. But he finds out that today people dont like elves, and all elves would be burned at the stake.
He is brought up but the Gladius Armor can withstand the fire and he will be brought the finest warriors and mages in the town to begin his quest and remeber his past.
June 17, 2003, 15:35
January 8, 2005, 17:39
1/5.
January 9, 2005, 10:25
A couple of things besides the obvious of "too short", not enough description, about as interesting as drying paint...
There is no plot, no drama, and no hook to this character. Nothing to make this character more than a cypher.
At least your English skills are better than PAR.
I want you to think about the Gold Standard:
If the character (item/ setting/ plot) is not as well described or as well developed as a character (item/ setting/ plot) in a novel (excluding horrible game fic novels), then it is not yet ready to be posted. If it is not the equal of said characters, then you need to do more work on it.
February 22, 2013, 7:01
I'm as guilty as the rest, but I hope in the decade(!) since devblu posted this, we've gotten better as a writing community.
April 30, 2013, 21:50