I like this a lot and can definately see the depth with this one. I can tell it is a project just from al lthe other related submisisons that go along with it which I will have to read at another time.
I did take .5 off because I became real confused with al lthe common names; Sangia, Sangreal, and Sangius. Sangia wanted the wealth of Sangia added to his own, and thus began the century of warfare, with the Order of the Golden Sword and the mounted Winged Knights bringing battle against the ghost worshipping Ozeans. Probably the most confusing sentence. Go to Comment
Mythology, History, Biblical Motifs... its got it all!
I love "Old Voz" and I love this passage: "The basic nature of Sangia is the prime reason that the basic tenets of the Trinity involve the abandonment of idols, since having a 12 foot statue of a dragon cast from gold would really make Sangia happy, it would also turn the Trinity into a dragon cult." Go to Comment
A good rationale for not using something beats simply adding another option. Yes, they could throw that axe if really necessary, but making them detest that option gives them even more color. My question is answered. Go to Comment
Copper is a rather soft metal and prone to corrosion, so copper weapons are inferior to brass, bronze, iron, and steel weapons. The copper axes used by the Ozians are ceremonial, and most do not even have a sharpened edge. Go to Comment
I agree that a throwing axe is a worthy weapon, but one that doesn't suit the Ozian style of fighting, they are a doughty and phlegmatic people who rather loathe the idea of throwing their weapons rather than wield them in their hands. They also have a long history of dealing with the undead, and often ogres, so throwing a weapon isn't the best way to deal with either larger foes, or slower ones. Go to Comment
A good solid post. It is well executed. It flows well. It gives us backstory, an OOP things (Fortean for Out of place) as a bionic sea craft on land, and a number of potential hooks. Really two paws up. Go to Comment
Patterns in surnames: There are many ways a surname could have evolved over centuries. One possibility is migration. A Roman name may have traveled to France and hence to England where it was later Anglicized. Case in point - the surname Lawrence went from Laurentius (Roman) to Laurent (French) to Lawrence (English) and then to Lowry (Scottish). There is also natural etymological evolution. For example, a Middle English spelling may have evolved to a modern English spelling (e.g. Stiward to Stewart). Where did your character's Surname come from?