It was pretty much my first submission... I guess I could revisit it. Back then there just wasn't as many high quality submissions, so stuff like this got pretty good votes.
As for the 'rock jacket.' I'm sorry you didn't like it, I think a 1 is a little harsh, but I can live with it. I'd just like to thank you for going out of your way to see what else I could do. Go to Comment
I felt bad about knocking your rock jacket so I went and looked up one of your other submissions to see if I could give you a bump there. At any rate I looked this up and I can't believe these people gave it such high ratings. After all Moonie made the post a couple of weeks ago about vote inflation, and how we shouldn't just be nice etc. My point is that this arrow which causes the illusion of pain and then disappears is nothing more than a standing spell or temp. curse. It lacks style and the context and the back story is weak. I don't see how it is in game use could further roleplaying.
I love some of the other stuff you have done, and I am sorry this is not one of them.
I think the days would be a highly appropriate duration if this brew was part of a local celebration, giving the drinkers instant costumes for thier parts. Locals seeing the characters with wings might draw interesting conclusions.
"Oh, so you're the fertility angel now? My son in law needs some guidance, you understand. Here's the honey-butter, go and get to work."
What happens when the wings wear off? They just go "poof", or do they shed and disintegrate? Go to Comment
Do you have a mad alchemist who thinks he is a brewer in the area?
How long is the life expectancy of some wise ass Barkeep who serves this stuff to someone who does not want non-functional angelic wings? Unless I was really lawful good, this man would be in a difficult way soon after.
Ditto for said mad alchemist (soon after I find them)...
How expensive/ inexpensive is this stuff? If it is expensive, wouldn't you ask for your money upfront... as the outraged patron probably is not going to pay. So you, the barkeep, would be out all that money. Go to Comment
Thanks for you feedback. You can use this however you want, I was just trying to throw an idead out there for fellow Gms to use. I see now that i should have put alittle more thought into it... Ill be more careful in the future. Thanks. Go to Comment
A small, primitive village has yet to discover fire, which is a good thing because there are highly flammable (but not otherwise dangerous) gasses in the air. The heroes, blissful in their ignorance, don't know that and think it a wonderful idea to show the locals open flame.