I appreciate all your comments seeing as how I'm new to the site and always open to tips that can help me out... And yes i realized this was not a Dnd speficic site and i would have used terms to apply it to other games but i was a) half asleep and b) i havent played many other rpgs, Ive played Dnd and a little Palladium so i apologize for any confusion caused by my lack of thought. Thank you all for your support and critisism, it helps me out alot. Any tips on what a good description could be? I also meant to put in a duration but forgot. Go to Comment
It was pretty much my first submission... I guess I could revisit it. Back then there just wasn't as many high quality submissions, so stuff like this got pretty good votes.
As for the 'rock jacket.' I'm sorry you didn't like it, I think a 1 is a little harsh, but I can live with it. I'd just like to thank you for going out of your way to see what else I could do. Go to Comment
I felt bad about knocking your rock jacket so I went and looked up one of your other submissions to see if I could give you a bump there. At any rate I looked this up and I can't believe these people gave it such high ratings. After all Moonie made the post a couple of weeks ago about vote inflation, and how we shouldn't just be nice etc. My point is that this arrow which causes the illusion of pain and then disappears is nothing more than a standing spell or temp. curse. It lacks style and the context and the back story is weak. I don't see how it is in game use could further roleplaying.
I love some of the other stuff you have done, and I am sorry this is not one of them.
I think the days would be a highly appropriate duration if this brew was part of a local celebration, giving the drinkers instant costumes for thier parts. Locals seeing the characters with wings might draw interesting conclusions.
"Oh, so you're the fertility angel now? My son in law needs some guidance, you understand. Here's the honey-butter, go and get to work."
What happens when the wings wear off? They just go "poof", or do they shed and disintegrate? Go to Comment
Do you have a mad alchemist who thinks he is a brewer in the area?
How long is the life expectancy of some wise ass Barkeep who serves this stuff to someone who does not want non-functional angelic wings? Unless I was really lawful good, this man would be in a difficult way soon after.
Ditto for said mad alchemist (soon after I find them)...
How expensive/ inexpensive is this stuff? If it is expensive, wouldn't you ask for your money upfront... as the outraged patron probably is not going to pay. So you, the barkeep, would be out all that money. Go to Comment
As you emerge from the shop in the alleyway, not-too-distant clanging and stamping makes you wary. Further investigation reveals a massive Balgrian protest march flooding the main street, banners roaring about the inhuman conditions in which this ethnic group is forced to live. City guards stand helplessly by, beating up the odd protestor, but unable to hold back the flow. Onlookers throw vegetables at the Balgrians, and shout abuse.