Strolen\s Citadel content. 
BND Movement and sub-culture
Society/ Organizations  (Artistic/Performance)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:19 PM
I think with a bit of work, it would fit in the 100 word submission.

It makes sense apart from I"m not sure what BND stands for. Go to Comment
Dwarfs of Damor
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:16 PM
No need to cloud fantasy with the practicalities of reproduction. There are many legends of creatures, gods, beings with clear genders being spawned from rocks, foreheads, and various other weird sources. Perhaps these dwarves did it the old fashioned way and got cursed/blessed into being tubers at a later point.

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Locations  (City)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 10:02 AM
A great start to a very interested planar location. I feel there should be some linkage of some sort to Corpsefall - my own dimensional hell.

I'll definitely put some thought into what can be linked here. Its very cool! Go to Comment
The Tale of Solomon Soulhammer Pt. III
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:12 PM
Ditto. This is excellent.
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Machinama, a cult in Refuge Beneath the Waves
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 12:07 PM
Amazing detail and depth on this one. Very good job! Go to Comment
Queen Llaewyn Reborn
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:55 AM
Love the style, but the end result is murky. A formally 'good' princess comes out as Maleficent?

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Motive Spirits
Items  (Transports)   (Sentient)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:49 AM
I'm with Aramax. Yes, its ground that has been driven over before, but that can apply to 90% of everything.

Good ideas, neat stuff!
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Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:44 AM
Neat stuff here - excellent, creepy fiction! Go to Comment
Slang and Jargon Beneath the Waves: The Big Under
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:29 AM
This is excellent. So much detail into each one. Great stuff here Axle!

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The Light and His Lady
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:22 AM
Agree with Mystic. It seems usable as some text in a book PCs find, but its so metaphysical its usage is quite limited. Go to Comment
Xue Ren (Snow/Blood Blade Edge)
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Combative)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:15 AM
This is pretty cool. Nicely stylized.

One thing about that text at the start:

“A kill within every ten steps,
Not leaving traces within a thousand miles,

Umm, if you killed every 10 steps, that is a pretty easy trace to follow :P
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The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:11 AM
A nicely described city. Lots of useful little details.

I find the name 'Havocian' somewhat amusing. I expected you to describe their activities as spreading Havoc. :)

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The Tale of Solomon Soulhammer Pt. II
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:07 AM
Really more fiction than NPC, but its still really good. This one could have been longer :)
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A Grave Problem
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:01 AM
Very straightforward and usable. Good stuff. Go to Comment
The Stolen World, Overview and Codex
Locations  (World)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-13 11:00 AM
This is an interesting start - it feels like a set of notes as opposed to a full submission.

Some neat ideas here. Go to Comment
The Tale of Solomon Soulhammer Pt. I
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-12 08:02 PM
A very good background piece. Was he speaking metaphorically about using his father's tools - a blacksmiths hammer and a warhammer are different beasts.
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Apocalyptic Vampires
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-12 10:32 AM
A straightforward idea, though the Sword freetext I think is a stretch. Go to Comment
Castle Kaukenn
Dungeons  (Other)   (Rooms/ Halls)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-12 09:01 AM
A very interesting location - I like castles pitched into the Abyss.

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The Elder Crow of the Tarlathii
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-02 10:01 PM
An AG Sub! A Coldforges Sub! Awesome.

I like the feeling it conjures up. Adds atmosphere to possession.

And I love the idea that superstitious rituals have real purpose and need. Go to Comment
Mark Greaves, Assassin Hobo
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Travelers)
valadaar's comment on 2015-02-12 08:22 AM
Lots of potential with this one - so long as he keeps a low profile, and homeless is good at that.

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Rain slowly builds, thunder and lightning continue to roll in. Road muddies, horse/wagon getting stuck in the mud. Thunder strikes coinciding with a deep hole a horse just walked in, horse panics, breaks its leg (maybe just sprain?). Horse is decompacitated and the rain just went from pouring to an all out monsoon. Shelter needs to be found, horse needs to be taken care of, covered in mud, add the posibility of items being lost to the confusion with the wind and dealing with spooked animals.

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