This is one of the best-written pieces on the citadel that i have seen. There are several things I don't like about it, most of them nit-picky, so I won't mention. It's a great post, and who doesn't love dragons? Go to Comment
I have to admit a slight bias against posts about flowers and restaurants, but maybe that will change over time. And having said that, I like this post. I like the blue diamond bowls and deposit system, and the way it grew from a small stand and how some rich people come to eat at the shabby place is realistic. I'm not sure what I'd like to see more.. maybe personalities of cooks or waiters or a more detailed history or a plot hook? Sorry I'm not able to suggest more. Go to Comment
I'm also not a big fan of psionics, but that doesnt affect this post. It would be interesting to hear more about how the races interact. I mean, in many world psionics and changelings for example are feared and hated because it *is* sort of creepy to think someone could be messing with your mind or your trust of them. Your race posts are already very thorough, so I'm not suggesting it here, but it would be cool to see somewhere (and mayeb this already exists and I haven't found it yet as I'm new) a post discussing how the different races in your world interact with each other. Go to Comment
They have zippers! Watch out every other race. I bet the only chance poor old normal humans have is that the zippers invented by 1900 probably get stuck a lot.
Seriously... this is a great post and lots of credit to echo mirage for his comments along the way. I'm not a big fan of "futuristic" meets the past - always leads to many problems with logic I think. But this is done very well so far (although, because of its nature as a scroll, it's a little scattered).
Bottom line, I'm not inclined towards this race, and it does draw strongly on many previous things (elves, final fantasy-type games or worlds with airships, etc.) I think it's an awesome post/collaboration. Go to Comment
I like the post, but like Krome I don't understand from reading this why they segregate the sexes in such a peculiar way - it seems to me like both sexes think they are better than the other. In fact, the whole race seems very haughty and abrupt, which makes me surprised that they would be good diplomats. I see you gave some explanation of that in your replies already though. Go to Comment
I really like the beginning of this, but in the end I was waiting for more. Sometimes that's good, sometimes a partial idea makes me think of many possbile endings and new ideas, but I didn't get as much inspiration as I had hoped from the great beginning. Go to Comment
Maybe it's a simple idea, but this post gives me a lot. Players could be on a quest and return to find that there is a movement to destroy cities, and their hometown is being destroyed.. they probably shouldn't just kill the "bad guys" but need some solution (unless they agree with the movement!) to save the cities from. I'm sure other people have used this before, but it's new to me. Go to Comment
The soul of a mage has been trapped in his own bust for centuries. The bust is a foot in height and made of a dark silvery metal. It is well crafted, perfect in every detail of the mage's features. The frozen expression is one of shock. It was sold off in auction after the mage's unexplained disappearance and has been passed around as a curio ever since. The cause of his entrapment? He practiced in secret; none knew of his hobby. Being self taught, he was unable to tell that the spell he thought was for protection was actually for entrapment...