Great addition to Mathom! Very, very fun and fitting. Blends well with our limited expectations and a brilliant expansion.
I almost wanted Nartine to inadvertently prevent some kind of deeds by her stubbornness. King stuck at the gate foiled an assassination attempt. The horse breaking its leg saved a child it would have hit later. But then I figured that would be too much actual accomplishment so I dropped the idea.
Solid idea. Interesting take with the disenfranchised half-beings is good. Nothing special about it, just a good idea seed to start some brainstorming. Some example NPCs with some short histories or maybe some short anecdotes on what the troupe has encountered to give it some more depth would make it easier to see your vision.
What this is primed for is a Checka special: 30 Traveling Troupe Characters.
A great start that really has potential to jump to a higher vote. The core is there though, just enough to get the mind rolling.
I was hoping for more about the silver axe. The foreboding, the usage, how they contain their own order when they know the madness is coming and how they keep it secret. There is a depth to this post where we are only seeing the tip. Would really love to hear more on it. Also a bit more on the land. With an order spread through the land with different lodges, lycanthropy must play a large part in the land. Which gets me curious about that too.
I always love your lists Cheka!! They are FANTASTIC fodder for random charts for almost any game. Super useful and always have some creative ideas in there are sometimes simple yet unique and others that are just brilliant.
Clever is right. That is a really cool idea. And there is a very large amount of skill needed to use that cane so even if it fell into the wrong hands it would be basically useless to them, even in they could engage the braille.
I like the book a lot and the way it is presented is just fine, no issues on that. The question I have is about your percieved availability of the book. From the first part I get conflicts whether it is a single book that is handed around or something that can be created by those that know how. Refering to "the creator" implies that many can be made yet it seems a somewhat specialized item that is tied to a specific circumstance that wouldn't readily be duplicated.
The other thing I felt needed a little more was on how somebody would give this as a gift if it was a single item. It seems to me that the book should effect every person that holds it, not just an intended victim? In this case then it might be difficult for the current reader to give it away in the first place unless he already knows the nature of the book and doesn't get addicted to it. Maybe I am catching that one the wrong way though. Go to Comment
Can't really vote on it as it is a somewhat confusing telling. Most of it is about the person but I am grasping at it to determine why she is legendary. Starting at "The age of 15" all the narration after that makes no sense to me and that was what I was counting on to see the legendary aspect of the character. You tell me she is the most influential but I am failing to fully understand why. I need a tale, not just a basic discussion of various bullet points. Go to Comment
I have been meh about seeing it. As far as super hero movies go, I have been burned out since the second Spiderman. However, I did watch Deadpool and enjoyed it and this one is on the list. Go to Comment
I was idly wondering if nobody was actively warring, would the sounds still reverberate as mentioned. So if this drum found its way into a humble village and they used it for celebration or ritual. They wouldn't notice much about it except it is a nice drum. But maybe 2 clans are at war not super far away and they keep hearing this mysterious beat of a drum.... Go to Comment
The mutated offspring of a forced mating have a halved lifespans. During that lifespan, however, they are basically slaves to the whore-spider. They collect food, provide protection etc. They have partial morph abilities that can cause quite an odd shape when scared or captured. They are not able to control the shifting as well as their parents so often, if seen or captured, they twist into grotesque shapes of random spiders and bugs they have come across.
If birthed away, they are bold and brazen in trying to find their way back to the sire. They will wander aimlessly and not back down from any sized barrier or danger. The poisonous types of these are most dangerous to humans who are in their path as their morphing abilities often translate into survival skills and enhanced poisons.
When two whore-spiders meet, they fall into the spell of each other's luring skills and procreate till the male dies of exhaustion. During this intense workout, a non-sticky version of their webbing is constantly being thrown out and is twisted and strewn about. Sometimes, but not often, the spiders may get entwined in it and both perish. This thread is coveted for something...
Alchemists use their venom to make love potion #9? When found with the webbing....?
A rumour of the knights of some powerful king that sleep until danger threatens the kingdom.
The truth is that they were rebels, trying to split the kingdom. Once captured they were put into an enchanted sleep, protected from age and harm, until their aims have been carried out by others in which case they will awaken.
There is a loophole in the spell in that trying to take one of their weapons will also awaken them.