I like your secret of the slumbering dragon - it would be interesting to see that expanded; perhaps as a historical piece.

so we have a ruling body, Diplomats/Lawyers, Military, Sorcery, Teachers, Tradesmen(and outsiders), and a secret service; a nicely rounded society to cover most major aspects of life. Also, I am fond of all things desert! Go to Comment

Each of these is a handy springboard plotling in itself, easily expandable into something useable! A great 30 Go to Comment

Oh yeah, this is a nice, fearsome object. I would have it in the hands of a villain, for sure; at first/low levels the pc's will just hear rumours of the villain slaughtering people in the lands, and as the campaign draws on and their levels are raised, the foe will become more prominent in their adventures, and they will learn of the rough-shaped dagger the foe possesses. Go to Comment

I like Sveridan's Torch - it makes him seem a touch necromantic through demonic power; creating 'undead' thralls by enshrouding his victims to do his bidding.
Also, that they are manifestations of gluttony make sense - they live to consume everything.
A worthy, wily demonic lifeform - I am interested to hear of the demon which these creatures are spawned from. Go to Comment

An object suitable to enhance undead which PC's face, rather than have them own it. It could be a useful item to confound PC's who think they know how things work, by having the undead they are facing suddenly work tactically! Go to Comment

Update: Added some Horizontal Rules to try and help space the sub out. Dang thing >:| Go to Comment

The greatest compliment that can be received is knowing that someone's used my stuff :) That's why I write here, and it inspires me to write again. Thanks Father Stabbingston! I would love to know how it's received! Go to Comment

So cool, Moon. You've re-created a post-apocalyptic world under the sea; have you played Bioshock? It seems to have influences of it in here.

I'm sure each settlement will become more and more unique as time goes on, with their own lifestyles and superstitions - the ones without rail access will probably become especially eccentric with less access to other folk. This way, new religions and cults and societies can be forged out of the settlements; if the pcs have to visit a settlement that has been isolated for decades they may find themselves attacked as heretics!

You've flipped the world upside down with this: as the sea becomes more well known and mapped, it is the land which becomes like the ocean, unexplored and mysterious! Go to Comment

This is nice, and i think would fit more as a fairy tale in a game about the sun and moon, than an actual physical place.

Short and sweet, and with good imagery. Go to Comment

It is what it is: an in depth and sensible calendar and time system for dwarvish folk.

I would say that it would be unlikely that there are geysers in every dwarven population that burst every hour; which leads me to think that the way around this is making the time largely subjective and having the adaptability that dwarves have with changing time systems (and their stubbornness) if a dwarf goes to another locale with a geydir that actually erupts 1 1\3 hours, they would simply deny that the time is different and say that it is correct, even though the day technically is a fair bit longer.
just like when they are on the surface and adapt to the surface time, they will adapt to different variable dwarf-locale times. Go to Comment

This tale made me smile. I enjoyed the parallels you presented between the simple snow-fight and war. A well written short tale.

I'm somewhat at a loss as how to vote on it though, since I don't really see a lot of short stories in here. Nevertheless, I'll give it a 4 - well written and made me smile. Go to Comment

I read through all of this thinking 'hey, this guy is pretty cool!', and then I saw your disclaimer at the end and Gossamer's comment about it being very similar to a lot of things she had already seen :(

whellp, I'm not as well versed as others in this stuff, and this sounded fun to me, so I'll give you that extra bit of score! Go to Comment

Its a handy maze which can be slotted into any number of campaigns, just by slapping whatever goal the party needs to accomplish in the tower in the middle. Go to Comment

It appears I am having issues with spacing and paragraphs when I write up submissions directly in the editor; apologies if this makes it a more difficult read! Go to Comment

Fair call, Gossamer. I get caught up in expanding the story and then it just grows too much. I think I will try and set myself a limit for some future subs. Go to Comment

Will Matteus Carter be a recurring character in future transcriptions? :p

I like the way you structured this sub; what we are reading is Matteus's interpretation of this poem and it may not be correct, which means if anything is wrong about this sub for your own dwarves in your specific game, you can explain it away due to the interpretation.

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A nice snippet which is vague enough to be adapted into many games! Go to Comment

Hoo hah! The demons in Atheus are the people of Atheus! That's twisted! So in effect, without knowing it they are enslaving their own ancestors as slaves! Really interesting take on demons and hell, Caesar; I like very much!

Jacob Latris has unwittingly come upon the source of magic in Atheus itself, not to mention the means to manufacture demons for his own purpose! A dangerous gift to bestow on someone if his questionable morals and sanity!

I like that the idea of the afterlife and congeria are nothing like what Atheans expect. What a demoralizing thing to know if they ever find out that when they die they may just be processed and turn into chaotic monsters. Go to Comment

This sub is worthy!

I think this is great, LS! This would be great for a historical npc, and snippits of it can be used in multiple games.

it has a very nice storytelling aspect to it, reminds me of the old CaptainPenguin Subs from years ago. Go to Comment

I love the idea of the wasp venom missiles; so they are designed to get within a proximity of the target and explode in a shotgun style scatter? Really devastating! Go to Comment