Strolen\s Citadel content. 
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-25 11:21 PM
I think it use a little clarification since it says that it can kill animals via a fast acting neurotoxin, but is not horribly dangerous to humans or larger creatures. Rather than a it touch you die effect, it might be a serious threat to children and the elderly or the infirm, while a healthy human, or horse is just going to be made very sick, displaying neurological symptoms from the 'hit'.

Certainly unique and something that I have never seen before! Keep it up! Go to Comment
The Patch Magic Symbiot of Immense Power!
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-26 08:16 AM
Ummm...I have 2ed and 3.5ed Dungeons and Dragons, I guess I am showing my age too. Go to Comment
Trapper Ants
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-25 11:22 PM
Narcotic fire-ants? The trap making is a novel idea but that is about it. Go to Comment
The Characon
Items  (Transports)   (Non-Magical)
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-26 12:56 PM
I've been workin on it for a while now, and it was only officially posted this morning (Apr 26) Go to Comment
A Night's Rest
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-25 08:54 AM
Its short, and there are no major writing flaws such as bad spacing, or alot of misspelled words. I would like it better if there was more detail, possibly about the innitself, perhaps the style of clothing of the building itself seeming out of date with more regular inns. I am also curious to know what caused it to become a ghostly wandering inn in the first place.

also very similar to my own Chateau Darque Go to Comment
The Calcobrinian Hotblood
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Plains)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-23 04:36 PM
And natural spiritedness is another way to say that Calcobrinian Hotblood are crazy in the head. Go to Comment
The Calcobrinian Hotblood
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Plains)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-11 12:43 PM
Shameless plug! Go to Comment
The Eye
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-25 09:11 AM
A swirling hole in the sky, a swirling halo of bruised light showing in unnatural shades of nebulous purple and bilious green and gaseous burning blue. The center is darkness, nay, it is the very absence of light. The Eye stares forth, an eye ready to blink...

I really like it! Go to Comment
ACL - The Water Column Building
Locations  (City)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-23 09:55 PM
Well, pretty much what every one else has said, adding in a plug for Resident Evil, and the Umbrella Corp. Go to Comment
My First Character
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - In General)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-22 11:30 PM
Stout Lagerale, your stereotypical frothing at the mouth drunken dwarven berzerker. He came from a clan of beer brewers and he ran around with a thing called a tankard-axe, a pole-arm with a tankard with a blade handle mounted on the end of it. In true old school fashion, the tankard unscrewed so he could toss one back before getting into a bare knuckle brawl. Stout lived a moderately long life before meeting his untimely demise at the gaze of a medusa.

His last words, How ugly could she be? Go to Comment
My First Character
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - In General)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-22 11:30 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Mastere, the Necromancer Queen
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-22 10:45 PM
Updated: The breast paragraph was Muro's idea! He is evil. Go to Comment
Mastere, the Necromancer Queen
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-23 09:16 AM
1. I would make the assumption that the basic spells of necromancy were originally created by Mastere, with (pulls out PHB for Matan) with spells like Soul bind, Create Greater Undead, and Finger of Death being the equivalent of signature spells. She was the basic founder of necromancy in my setting and the current repetoir of spells are either hers (Animate dead) or were built on her work. Finding a book of special spells, her custom grimoire would be something that the Church would work very hard to make sure didnt happen!

2. Mastere came from no book, only my demented imagination. I have a picture that I call Mastere and when the gallery is working I will post it. (not my artwork) Go to Comment
The Avenger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-22 09:49 PM
I like the idea, a healing imbued sword though I myself would make one change, if a mortal wound is inflicted on someone with the sword, they can still die. The regeneration should require a living host, so no bodies are going to grow new heads if they are decapitated with the sword. Despite the limb growing back, getting it chopped off in the first place is still going to hurt like who knows what! I would limit how many times this power could be used, perhaps something like once a day, or 3 times a week or something like that to keep it from becoming an arms factory har har! Go to Comment
The Vaincre Mantle
Items  (Clothes)   (Villanous)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-23 09:26 AM
Spell checked, went over my caps, and caught a continuity error. I mistakenly wrote that Mastere cast off the mortal coil and gave up the cloak when it was Lashrac! Go to Comment
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-04 08:43 AM
A fairly average flaming sword, the decription, however, is precise and good, and while it is short it shows definite improvement. I like some of your names, Col. Drackler Go to Comment
Protoss - A fantasy version
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-22 04:45 PM
Big fan of Starcraft, and this is a good write-up of the Protoss. The only thing that I would add would be the Xel'Naga and their quest to find perfection of Form, which they achieved in the Protoss, as each creature is so immune to age, disease, and such. As a side note, the Xel'Naga would later experiement with the Zerg race and the quest for the Perfection of Essence, creating the assimilating organic horror of the Zerg Swarms who would later devour the Xel'Naga themselves. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-18 09:22 PM
Not bad, but nothing really WOW. Execution is good. Go to Comment
gentleman's killers
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-18 04:48 PM
No story, barely an item, and the grammar was horrible.

round blade blade?

I know this review is harsh, and I want to say something constructive, something to encourage you to try again, or to even redo this submission. I dont know what to say along those lines other than dont give up! Go to Comment
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When a miracle is worked, when a God turns His attention to the mortal realm, the mortal realm is irrevocably changed by the Divine Presence. When this takes place through a living being, they become the Godmarked. Ever with one foot in life, and one foot in the realm beyond, they are emotionally and physically altered - always in a fashion that reflects the nature of the God that they have channeled - One who channels a God of the Winds may forever have a breeze lifting their hair, while a Goddess of Anger may blacken the skin and strengthen the body.

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