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Rangerspeak
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-09 10:00 AM
This is great. I wish I could totally do this myself, but alas i am lazy when it comes to the mechanics of this. I tried already. I did come up with a very simple Thieves cants once that I will try and locate, but it was no where near this complete.

Good job. Go to Comment
The Guild of Arcane Combatants
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-09 09:53 AM
Ok, I like this a lot. It fits well if you would link back your other submission to this one.

I like the flavor of the guild.

What made them who they are? Why did they first form? What motivates them to help everyone, to hire their services out? I see that some battles you said are sometimes determined before the conflict begins to the benefit of the guild. What determines that? Do they have another motive that is not seen to the public?

Unfortunately to many questions popped up when reading this. It is still a wonderful submission however. Go to Comment
The Wizard's Rube
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-09 10:31 AM
Kinda spooky flower if you ask me. If I saw an entire cluster of flowers turn and point to another direction I was choose to walk away in the other direction. Very spooky. Go to Comment
Mediaeval Style Mythical Beasts
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-04-21 11:40 AM
This is a great idea. I have recently begun searching old beastiaries of different cultures for ideas for creatures. It is where the Alerion bird I created came from... This is a true helpful submission just to let people know about the amount of information out there that we are forgetting. Go to Comment
Sovereign's Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 03:17 PM
Agreed with the two heathens above me. This is a wonderful first post item. Its not magical so I have no hopes of it being munchkin powered.

I personally need more background but that doesnt mean it isnt a bad post. Its pretty good, but could use more detail.

A second thought would be to detail out the Sovereign's Finest and the Gryphon Knights. Both sounding interesting.

Good job on your first try. Keep it coming. Go to Comment
The Full Goblet
Locations  (Establishment)   (Other)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 01:17 PM
I had thought I commented on this back in the older version of Strolens.

I llike it. While the location is left to be desired, it seems to mundane and too common place. Nothing special about it other than the magical goblet. Which is what the submission is about. With that, it is a good submission. The item is unique and entertaining. useful in its own way. However if you make the first drink wonderful, giving them a desire to drink from it again perhaps then make it vile. There are many ways to make it entertaining. Make the taste random perhaps, determined by how many times someone has partaken of the drink.

All in all a 3.0 good solid idea, but a .5 for originality. Add in some more background on it, where it came from, why was it originally created, then who knows. Go to Comment
Madam Pernouds Alehouse
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 10:10 AM
Ancient Gamer: Solid location ready for insertion into a setting.

The best choice of words by far.

I like it. Dirty city settings always are best visited at night when playing so the feeling matches what is being described. I like it.

A few questions however. Who is the owner? How long has it been there? Any exciting events happen there? Like did it burn down in a barfight only to be rebuilt back on the same spot exactly the way it was prior? Go to Comment
The First Era of Hewdamia
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-03-24 04:05 PM
Not sure if this qualifies as a labor of love or just a version of a Psychosis.

Thank you though. I have put a lot of time and years into this and it has become more of a job than a hobby. I have much more information about Hewdamia that I haven't even touched yet. But it is nice to know others enjoy it as well as I do. You should read the others... it fleshes the world out more. Go to Comment
The First Era of Hewdamia
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-06-15 10:36 AM
Thanks again Mike for your comments. Any ideas to add to this to make it a further success let me know. Go to Comment
The King's Paupers
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Country/ State)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-01-07 01:51 PM
Ah yes I remember this. This was part of an ongoing thread idea in the forums about guilds and such... I will have to edit this here in the near future and see if I can create it the way it should be. Go to Comment
The King's Paupers
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Country/ State)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-03-13 10:55 PM
Updated: New rewrite. Go to Comment
The King's Paupers
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Country/ State)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-03-14 10:09 PM
I like the 'farm team' idea Moon. read a book where it had something very similar to it. May have to look into that a little deeper for the next one. Go to Comment
The King's Paupers
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Country/ State)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2013-04-15 11:39 AM
I don't really think the scale was to large as the listed number of members isn't in a single city but in many. It's a vast number of groups through more than a single kingdom. Go to Comment
The Orc Tick
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Other)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 01:55 PM
Being attacked by a giant tick is semi discusting, yet worth the laugh I would get if I threw it at my gamers.

The title is a bit of a shy away. I almost didn't peek in and view it because of the title. The fact that the orcs have a folklore about them is interesting. Because of these insects, they are the reason they don't have other diseases. All in all a decent idea that needs more fleshing out but still a good one.

.5 added for the orc reasoning behind the ticks. Go to Comment
The Orc Tick
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Other)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-22 11:49 AM
I actually ment the preview of it. But oh well... Go to Comment
Wrapper
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-05-08 03:11 PM
These are just plain weird. Indeed I was imagining a Cloaker when reading this. BUt it seemed more like a carpet pissed off at the world. I understand what it is, and the fact it has a semblance of a personality, unlike the aformetnioned critters, I still can't get it out of my head that it looks like a carpet. Its kind of cool none-the-less though with its ecology detailed out as it is... good job on the weird factor Cheka... Go to Comment
Tenets of Shadow
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-07 09:47 PM
Iain, that was their purpose. For every whisper there is a yell. For every dawn their is a dusk. For every good there is an evil. You can't have one without the other.

Thanks for commenting. Go to Comment
Tenets of Shadow
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-01-06 09:42 PM
Update: Fixed a few spelling errors and fixed the Justice Tenet as it was a hash of the Knighthood and was ill typed. Go to Comment
Tenets of Knighthood
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 09:20 AM
This is actually a break down of an original codec, for lack of a better term, in history about the morals of knighthood and honor. It was much larger and a great deal heavier to read. So this is an actual view of what knighthood was supposed to be like. Whether it was in history or not is clouded by those who write it. Go to Comment
Woolly Wyvern
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-07 01:58 PM
I like the idea. I never was one for large or different types of the same creature, wyverns and dragons in particular. But this gives a perfect reason as to why they are the way they are. Why do they not use fire on each other? Only because they are flamable themselves? I would think that would be the perfect reason to use it, especially in a fight over territory or food.

Still all in all, a good solid idea with plenty of reasoning behind it. Go to Comment
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