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NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-02 07:17 PM
Hey, he's a DnD newbie, read his name *smirk*
So, this time I will play the voice of reason (me? reason? wtf?)

Hear me, o newbie, for this page here is home to many wise yet demanding game-masters, story-tellers and dungeon-keepers.

A character posted here should be unique, not what a half-demented anime writer could come up with (he's like ninja and stuff and he does magic, man, and he's ... angry! and has a ... Katana of the Gods and his papa was a demon and mama was a sea cucumber and he's kewl and stuf, yo ... well, NOT like THIS)
He should be a character comparable to a figure in a WELL-written novel, with history, personality, realistic needs and motivations.
Read some of the higher-rated posts to see what I mean - the people who write them spend even hours on ONE. You will not gain respect here by dumping a plethora of two-line posts quickly.

Also, many people are not familiar with DnD - while I personally am, I harbor few positive feelings towards it, yet at least am able to understand what a post relying heavily on the mechanics of a system is about, yet many a Strolenite will not be able to do so. System mechanics are not necessary - a good post does NOT need them, as every half-brained GM is able to fit an idea into his game mechanics, and the people here are more adept than that (mostly ;)).

So, before you flame me, consider the fact that you are trying to be a productive member of an online community dedicated to quality role-play - so listen to those who offer advice: they mean it well. You can learn a lot here, and it will improve your role-play. It's up to you.

Still, I have to rate the post an '1'. Put more effort into it next time. Go to Comment
The Sword of the Stars
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-02 07:26 PM
*sigh* A +kazillion sword of whoopass. Where have we seen this?
Actually, a better-written item with an interesting history is much more desirable.
Also, look out into the world. People are not just good or bad, they're shades of grey. So think twice before stamping alignments on things. Go to Comment
The Sword of the Stars
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-08 01:20 PM
Okay, now wait a bit, dear Barbierian. Yes, we are critical. Why? Because this page is meant to give a GM something more interesting than some DnD supplement bought over the counter. The star system has only five different ratings, and if you consider the 3 a post you find vaguely interesting, then a two it is for a post which has many flaws and an '1' is for a post that should get you flogged. A four is an idea that is excellent and would not be unfit to be featured in the works of one of the masters of the fantasy genre, and a 5 is one that makes a seasoned GM fall on his behind, mouth agape, or forces him to jump out of his bath screaming 'heureka'.
Now, this post is nowhere near being vaguely interesting. There is no history, few explanations, and the post might have taken a whole MINUTE to write.
I am mildly amused by this post, and thus award a solid 1. Go to Comment
The Orb of Alternative Source of Magic
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-02 07:21 PM
Well, actually, the null-magic zones are tools for the GM when he does not want his plot to be circumvented through some stupid spell.
So it is munchkin. See where it leads: The PCs have to learn information from Fnord the Sage. He'd send them on a quest, for which the just reward would be the bit of knowledge. But no, a PC mage walks up to him, and reads his mind. No quest, no game, boooo-ring. Now, if Fnord sits in a null-magic zone, all is different.
Also, characters with no weaknesses are quite uninteresting as well. Go to Comment
The Orb of Craft
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-02 07:23 PM
Now, DnD-newbie, don't discard all the comments and brush them aside. They're well-meant. This item is boring and over-powered, especially in your beloved DnD: what is to stop the mage from creating any item he wishes if he does not have to pay the exp cost? Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-01 04:43 AM
While he may be considered foolish by his brethren, Cobrais isdoing more than any of his kin for the survival of his race - knowledge is power and without that power the humans cannot harm the Golden Ones, for - can you attack whatescapes your knowledge?
a solid 4/5 Go to Comment
Kanel Rull
NPCs  (Minor)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-30 04:27 AM
wtf? ROFL! While I like to use an ultra-evil boss sometimes, this just gives me the creeps... what if your potionsare laced with something, or Bubrudz the dwarf who forged your Holy Avenger Blade is in fact evil (evil, evil, evil) and uses it to influence you to do his bidding? Go to Comment
Kanel Rull
NPCs  (Minor)   (Knowledge/Lore)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-29 06:57 PM
Most devious! I like villains with style who are amusing still!
A cream pie fight might bwe much more perilous if the pies tossed by one side explode ;)
Surely better than some Archidreadmaster the Defiler of Worlds.
Two thumbs up. Go to Comment
Blackrose Academy
Locations  (City)   (Water)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-29 06:52 PM
I think the academy mightb ecome a mere pawn if it sell it services too often and does not show some backbone - its voice no longer commanding respect but rather provoking a smirk or frown. Go to Comment
Gator Hunt
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-28 02:02 PM
Could it be something more than a gator? I wouldn't go intothe "horror from beyond" category, but imagine the terror when the PCs finally put down a poor gator, only to have a THING emerge in a gush of sewage behind them just as they were about to rejoice in their victory. Perhaps some tentacle thing connected all the bodies of the murdered who were tossed into the sewer into a single malicious mass, or ... anyone saw Dogma? The Golgothan Shit Demon! Go to Comment
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Criminal/Espionage)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-28 02:11 PM
Now, this is an example of how an assassin can be written well... now, Scras, you wouldn't mind a bit more of personality? Go to Comment
Princess Avenue
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-28 01:57 PM
Don't forget places to waste cash, man! Theatres/gladiatorial arenas, a noble casino or two, an extra-fancy auction house...
the major banks should also be housed in the vicinity, perhaps this area of town could be surrounded by a second city wall, creating a true forbidden city... Go to Comment
Coldfire Urn
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-28 02:06 PM
I can but join the crowd in its applause. 5/5 Go to Comment
Vantu of the Hanal
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-19 04:40 AM
While a love interest can spice up a character, it should by no means be mandatory...
The enemy here is not a person, but rather the turns of events he must face. His pride, loneliness and the compromises he must make are the enemies to be faced, not a man in a black cloak.
4/5 Go to Comment
Nice to Meet You
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Campaign)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-24 02:09 PM
Interesting... so this is a way for two members of the party to meet, yes? A rogue and a mage, on the run together? Go to Comment
Veng the Manipulator
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-22 11:56 AM
A munchkin's dream - a psionic warrior mage serpent githyanki whatever... ack. And I though learning to pronounce stuff like 'phosphoenolpyruvatecarboxykinase' was tough.

All he's missing now is ... style. A reason to exist. A motivation. Playability. Background. Background. Background.

What he does not need is a +5 Vorpal Sword of Ultimate Killing and Shooting Lightning out of Several Orifices. He does not need to be immune to all energy attacks and everything. He does not need to make me *yawn*...
Where was I? Yes, we all can make up a super powerful bad guy who keeps Cthulu as a lap dog and eats candized archangels for breakfast.
With a fraction of the power and some spark of imagination, he might be a nice character? This way? At leastyou will draw a lot of replies, like many of the less-than-perfect posts do. Go to Comment
Veng the Manipulator
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-26 08:34 AM
Well - some sorces make it look like a lion centraur, while others depict it as a serpent with a human head... though this overlaps with the DnD Yuan-Ti... confusing, right?
And yes, add a halo of evil, because all Lamia are evil for evil's sake.
Evil! Go to Comment
Veng the Manipulator
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
EchoMirage's comment on 2005-01-19 02:36 AM
*sad grin* No. Veng is only interesting as the answer to the question: "How far can I stretch the rules?"
He does NOThave any personality, and would make a poor appearance in a novel. Now, I could think up a character in GURPS who was able to make 132 melee attacks per round, or to cause armor-ignoring damage without fear of retaliation, and that over large areas... for a meager 150 points, mind you! We're not showing off here who can make the most uber bad guy, we try to provide interesting personalities to incorporate into our games. Go to Comment
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-21 07:52 AM
This is vastly original... from the 'kill the wizard' clichee to a race against time - one surprising twist after another...

I certainly will try to use it and give credits to you ... after all is done. Go to Comment
Blade of Redemption
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
EchoMirage's comment on 2004-12-21 11:56 AM
I guess I will hold my vote back to see if vlad does change it.

Cursed weapons are a staple of fantasy, especially berserker swords. It will not be easy to make an exceptional one. Go to Comment
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The Muscimancer

The Lord of the Flies, the Muscimancer has studied magics that summon, control and otherwise deal with flies. The Fly Mage is an unwholesome character, also likely to have magics of disease, rot and pestilence up his sleeves. After fighting through his swarms of flies and his loyal acolytes and slaves, the Muscimancer reveals his final power, transforming into a giant half man half fly hybrid. He can fly, acid vomit, as well as continue to use spells, wield weaponry and command his swarms.

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