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Claws of the Emperor
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
Chaosmark's comment on 2011-12-20 12:14 PM
It might have worked better to have done some foreshadowing that shows the reliability of the oracles and necromancers. The PCs likely didn't take them seriously because they just didn't know of their reputation.

In the real world, that sort of thing happens all the time; in the game world, we probably need to give our PCs much greater hints. Go to Comment
Claws of the Emperor
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
Chaosmark's comment on 2011-12-20 12:14 PM

As usual, an AG plot that twists my brain in strange fashions. Well done.

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NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Political)
Chaosmark's comment on 2010-05-26 10:57 PM
I recall reading this while it was in-work a long time ago. It has met my high expectations. Very nicely done SnO. Go to Comment
Crown Octopus
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Chaosmark's comment on 2012-01-01 02:32 AM


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Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Chaosmark's comment on 2011-11-27 01:57 PM

The story gave it a bit extra flair beyond the interesting material. Not sure why it's got such a huge hype, but that's why we each have our own votes, ne?

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Liberty's Call PMC
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (World Wide)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-03-17 08:02 PM
You might find it better to make this a scroll and add scroll entries if you're going to be continually adding new material. That was the entire reason for scroll submissions, and it'll help the rest of us locate the new material. If you're not wanting others to add to it, you can set it to be so when you make it a scroll. Go to Comment
The America Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-02-26 01:17 PM
The crunch was decent. The style was good. But the flavor...beyond words.

Enjoy your 5/5, and keep these coming. Go to Comment
The America Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-02-28 01:55 PM
What? Do I hear speculation on realistic spacecraft and combat? Have a link! Go to Comment
Cloak of Dusk
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-02-15 04:48 PM
{Siren no Orakio} 3:26 pm: I have decided that I hate the word 'overpowered'
{Siren no Orakio} 3:27 pm: It's firmly rooted in the 'you're a level 3 peasant with no ability to change the world!' mentality
{Chaosmark} 3:29 pm: Very true.
{Chaosmark} 3:29 pm: Epic people sometimes need epic equipment.
{Chaosmark} 3:31 pm: Jedi are a good example of "overpowered equipment isn't"
{Chaosmark} 3:32 pm: A laser sword that can cut through almost anything, and kills in a single attack.
{Siren no Orakio} 3:32 pm: Heh.
{Chaosmark} 3:32 pm: Extremely overpowered. However, GM Lucas was smart in controlling it.
{Siren no Orakio} 3:33 pm: Well, the other thing is this:
{Siren no Orakio} 3:33 pm: When I am RPing or GMing, my feeling is that it's a story in which the PCs are supposed to be heros
{Siren no Orakio} 3:33 pm: They should be capable of heroic things
{Chaosmark} 3:34 pm: Of course. Why play if you're just going to be a peasant farming a field?
{Chaosmark} 3:35 pm: We want extraordinary.
{Chaosmark} 3:36 pm: Re: Overpowered - I think the word itself has valid applications, but most of the time ends up just being used as an excuse for GMs to not have to be creative in their GMing.
{Siren no Orakio} 3:36 pm: Luke Skywalker and Darth Vader had Light Sabers and the Force. King Arthur had Excalibur /and/ its sheath. Thor had Mjollnir. Kera gets.. the cloak of death
{Siren no Orakio} 3:38 pm: . A weapon which, technically, does 0 HP of damage.

Excalibur was overpowered. Lightsabers are overpowered. Overpowered compared to what? The average, common weapons wielded by average, common people. A hero needs heroic equipment. The Cloak of Dusk is no different. When you think about it, how hard is it to actually wrap someone up completely in a cloak? Normally you can only do it when they're sleeping or drugged. Newsflash: you can get the same effect with a knife. Overpowered? Not hardly. Besides, this has the lore to back up it's power.

Nicely done Siren. Go to Comment
Quickfoot Quagmire
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mercantile)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-02-05 03:17 AM
Aha! This is much better than the incarnation that you originally showed me. Now this is a solid, easy to use character for almost any setting. Excellent work. Go to Comment
30 Rods and Staves
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-30 04:28 PM
I absolutely LOVE The Staff of Omens. Is it's current bearer the ferocious King Lionus? :D

I like this 30. You really put a good bit of work into each of the 30 entries, which is infinitely better than some of the other 30s I've seen. Go to Comment
Princess Amelia, Princess of Lovebirds
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-31 07:06 PM
While this is certainly a good expansion of the 30 in question, it seems to lack the spark of interesting-ness. It seems to me that she'd make a decent background character, but she'll never be a major player in anything but a game of courtiers. Perhaps you could add a few examples of how she and her obsession might be included in a game? Go to Comment
Emotion 17
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-27 05:18 PM
You know, that last bit you added about the factory making thousands of chips really added what I thought was missing to the ending. I think the sub really flows together now. Good job manfred! Go to Comment
The Lost City of Akelor
Locations  (City)   (Mountains)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-27 10:34 PM
Aha. You mentioning Mountain of Boats reminded me of where else I had seen something this huge, this insanely long of a read. I've seen something roughly this length elsewhere, but no matter.

I absolutely love the atmosphere you created in this sub. To call it creepy is to degrade the horror and terror that this submission evokes. My description of this to Pieh was, "It's like Call of Cthulhu, but with STEAMTECH." I stand by my affirmation and description. This is a brilliant piece of art, and it opened in my mind vast vistas of adventures to be had within this area.

My one complaint is that something so simple as a rocket launcher could force Oagru Hactor-Newath from his interdimensional anchorage. Surely such a formidable being (described as being thaumaturgically powerful beyond description) could put up more of a fight. I should very much have liked to see something like what Mountain of Boats did, with two possible encounters, one as a lower-level encounter, the other as an epic-level campaign ending. I think what you've given here is the former. I think the latter might overload the Citadel with greatness should it ever be published, however.

This submission is the best I've seen in a very long time. While it seems to take up a sizable chunk of my comment, don't take my suggestion for the ending as anything more than a mild afterthought. The total submission more than makes up for such a small thing. Thank you for sharing this vision with us. Go to Comment
Twin Lotus
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-02-14 11:43 PM
It's nice to see an item with history when so often people gloss over the history of their items in favor of just giving powers, but in this case, it seems to me like the history doesn't match the description of the hammers. The enchantment on the hammers doesn't seem to have any mirror within the maker. However, this is still an excellent first submission, and a big improvement from before. Go to Comment
Roleplaying books
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-28 08:58 PM
I think the point of this submission is to give the players reason to 'avoid' that line of conversation. "Oh look, a book! What sort of interesting fluff does it have for us?" Go to Comment
Wood Spiders
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-26 07:56 PM
Not all dangers come in the gigantic carnivorous plant category. These are an excellent example of what else can pose a threat to your party. Very well planned and thought out, I like the overall completeness of this sub. It would be the simplest of things to pull out wholesale and use without hardly any modification. Go to Comment
Shababa the Orcish Dancing Girl
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-21 10:23 PM
I think the plot hooks could be fleshed out a bit more. Surely she could be more than just a passing NPC the players interact with before going on their merry way. Perhaps she could turn into a barmaid of some sort, simply to survive, and then dance by herself after the bar closes for the night? THAT might be an encounter to spice up your game.

"You walk downstairs to find a glass of water. As you walk around the corner, you see the orc barmaid up on the stage, dancing away with her eyes closed, looking more content than a cat on a lap. She's not half bad at the dancing either. What do you do?"

In all, I like this character, and think she's got some good potential, but how to use her could be added to just a bit more. Go to Comment
The Tome of Encomiastic Psilomantic Mirabilium
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - Genre)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-21 06:14 PM
Seems to me that most adventuring parties get avoided as insane and dangerous anyway... Go to Comment
The Tome of Encomiastic Psilomantic Mirabilium
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - Genre)
Chaosmark's comment on 2009-01-21 10:17 PM
I have the feeling this was intended to be a hidden sub that didn't get set as hidden. Go to Comment
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       By: Jarons20

AutoMedon – A mechanical poet of renown not for his vast catalog of poetry, but for his complete lack of anything written or spoken, having had no output in his programmed profession. His creator is unknown or at least unaccredited, and there are those in great number in the artistic world who wonder and marvel at his inability to produce poetry, crediting that flaw to his creator who is unknown or at least un-credited. There is also a small faction of scholars who believe that when he finally, finally speaks, it will be the most beautiful or sorrowful verse ever spoke or will ever be spoken. Whether his creator is among either group or dead is unknown. AutoMedon sits alone under a tin roofed enclosure, upon a stone chair, with his gaze off in the distant as if thinking.

“It’s strange to look at this mechanical man and think what thoughts are working through its’ workings or even if the damn thing is” – Aralis of Qurim, poet and pottery salesman

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