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The Order of Restraint

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Not all vampires in the land of the dead are bloodthirsty killers that want to take over the world. Some are satisfied with immortality and want to spend an eternity without strife in seclusion away from contant war with the humans.

‘Our neutral society was formed by a group of idealistic Vampires that did not favour war with the humans and formed this order with the permission of the Vampire King and Queen. However many other vampires did not agree with their approval and branded us as traitors! We who were approved by the Vampire King, the First Vampire himself! So we made our goodbyes and left vampire society to live among the humans so that we could finally find some peace’

The society/order of restraint is a footloose but not fancy free organization of vampires. They are trained to resist to the erge to drain life out a helpless victim and prefer to live a life of peace only using their necromanic powers if anyone treatens them or their loved ones.

It is formed of vampires that are peaceful souls and hate bloodshed. In a world where rival vampires would like to get you out of the way to be on the safe side and where the inquisition hunts anything not ‘natural’ not to mention fledgling vampire slayers trying to start on less vicious vamps first they find there is safety in numbers. It is basically a brotherhood that stay together for social reasons as well as protection. They do not hide as such but pretend to be humans and live amongst them (humans are the only race foolish enough not to see the difference). They do not have any desire for blood and sometimes socialize with humans. Apart from that they stay out of the affairs of man and undead, completely neutral.

While you may be thinking at this point that the order of restraint is an order of human loving vampires then you are wrong. Some of them genuinely enjoy the company of humans but most just don’t want to be part of a never ending war. So in a way they are selfish and more detestable than ordinary Vampires as alot of normal vampires seek to take over The Land of the Dead because they believe that they would be better rulers than the feudal human kings.

Also they have been known to have brief love affairs with humans preferring not to see their partners grow old and die. It is growing more common however for vampires to marry humans by means of a blood ceremony thus making their partner a vampire too. However it has become a kind of tradition to have several children before hand which vampires cannot do. Once the children reach 20 they will also become vampire.

And that is all there is to it, the Order is very loosely bound with no bases and few figures of autohority and no rules except ‘don’t kill the humans’.



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METHODS OF RESTRAINT:
1. The drinking of blood is like a natural craving and is not needed to survive. Blood is drink to feed the power of necromancy inside them.

2. Also the reason that normal vampires drink blood is because it is morally accepted. They stop their compulsion by simply being taught that it is wrong and a crime.

3. Then they just spend time under guard long enough to realise that they do not need blood to survive and overcome the addiction. Soon they lose all their necromanic powers and a lot of their strenght to become in essence the equivalent to strong humans.

4. sometimes tests are given for vampires with bad history to make sure they can withstond the compulsion.

5. other methods such as drinking less and less a day are used.

6. violation of these rules are punishable by exile without the protection of the order they soon die.
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necromancer
January 14, 2006, 19:16
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Updated: i made a few grammer mistakes
necromancer
January 14, 2006, 20:26
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Updated: more spell checks
Ancient Gamer
January 15, 2006, 7:25
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Hello necromancer and welcome to Strolen's.

I will not vote as this is still in the development phase. I will, however, give you a few pieces of advice:

1. After each full stop you must, I repeat: MUST, use capitalization. Capital letters improve the readability of your text tenfold.

2. This idea is better than I expected when I noticed it was about vampires. You try to move away from the cliche and we salute that. It does need more work however.

3. Okay, so they are an organization of peaceful vampires... But... How do they sate their thirst for blood? According to fantasy and litterature custom vampires are predators and humans are their prey: How do they suppress their predatorial instincts? Are these the Dalai Lama and Buddhist versions of vampires? (Do they do this for some intellectual ideal? Out of fear for the mentioned hunters and slayers? (And if so, are they like caged beasts, full of contempt and hate, but restrained by their need for caution))

4. How did the order come to be? Who founded it? Do they have a set of ideals? Is it a hierarchical organization, or do they have a flat structure? Do they perform any other services? (Like: do they serve in a special branch of the King's personal guard, or do they survive through pick pocketing or burglary?)

Just some questions to get you going. I hope you take the time to answer these, I would appreciate it.
MoonHunter
January 15, 2006, 10:40
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http://www.strolen.com/content.php?node=1272

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necromancer
January 17, 2006, 14:50
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Updated: Added much more detail put in some capitals and added Ancient Gamer's sound suggestions.
necromancer
January 17, 2006, 17:16
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Updated: Moving out of 'in work'
Voted manfred
February 26, 2006, 12:59
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Ahh, you have included the ways to deal with their blood addiction. Much better; now I can infer what are your assumptions (sorry, but it is needed if this has to be adapted).

1. An important pre-requisite! But note that many times vampires are _defined_ as critically depending on blood for their very survival. If blood is just the fuel to more power, then it is possible to break free of its hold.

2. Ummmm... hmmm. I would think most people were told, even taught at some moment in their lives that there are things which are wrong to do and constitute crimes. If this was ever so, why isn't crime practically non-existant today?

Don't take me wrong, with a strong education coupled to a good ideology many could be persuaded, but definitely not all. Even without evil intent, most will be tempted, and get into tempting situations. Also, especially if they are (individually) stronger than ordinary people, they will likely play with the thought of giving it a try. Some will try.

Even without evil intent (and there will be such people/vampires too), people will fall to their base desires. There will likely be repeated cases of vampires returning to the addiction, or children falling to it.

3. As with drug addictions, it will work for some... for some it may not.

4.,5. Okey.

6. Now, if there are vampires in the world, they have to survive in some way, too. Perhaps just state that most of them die because they are unfit for the 'jungle' outside of the peaceful village.

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As a side note, their method of procreation, and possibly of curing the addiction does require some blood... where do they get it from? Willing spenders? Bought for hard cash from willing vagabonds? Or they drain criminals for serious crimes?

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All in all, it is obvious you are trying to make a big cliche working, which is heartening. Still, it will take some work until it is functional.
necromancer
March 19, 2006, 17:26
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Updated: Sorry about not replying earlier but I had kinda forgotten about this post. Anyway thanks fo the the advice it is much appreciated.
Voted valadaar
January 23, 2007, 19:02
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Interesting, though I am reminded of the sharks in Finding Nemo.... Personally I think vampires should not be sugar-coated. They are anti-life and evil. But that's my opinion.

There are blatant spelling errors that should be addressed and some of the sentence structures need rewor - like
"In a world where rival vampires would like to get you out of the way to be on the safe side and where the inquisition hunts anything not 'natural' not to mention fledgling vampire slayers trying to start on less vicious vamps first they find there is safety in numbers. "

This should be three sentences - too much is being conveyed in one.

My advice - Take Moonhunter's Advice wholeheartedly.

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