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November 14, 2005, 9:30 am

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The Invisible Lake Beast


Unseen and striking from suprise, this creature is on its way to becoming a legend.

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The creature has never been seen and is only heard as a whisper before it attacks. The attacks are swift, brutal, and clawed. It is a messy eater, leaving a distinctive carcass behind. 

Additional Information
This is a unique product of a magical catastrophe, and it was actually a bear before.
Loosing much of its cellular structure, it still roughly keeps its original shape. However, it is not only semi-transparent, but also much lighter, up to the point that strong winds threaten to pick it up and dump somewhere else… likely killing it. The bear has learned to stay on the large lake it lived at, light enough to walk it, and holding to the water at the same time. It feeds on fish, as it did before, and occassionaly drowns an unlucky swimmer, giving rise to legends of a terrible invisible beast eating anyone approaching its lake. Be warned that it can move quickly on the lake’s surface, half-running, half-gliding toward its prey… 
The only luck is that it lost some of its strength along with its weight and muscles. It is also now a soft, squishy thing, dangerous only if it is allowed to attack. If faces strong opposition, it will withdraw as fast as it came.

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Voted MoonHunter
October 29, 2005, 19:57
I edited this one a great deal when I brought it from version 1.0 . I liked the idea before, and I like the idea better now.
Voted Zylithan
November 12, 2005, 3:13
Re: editing, There are still a lot of typoes or choppy parts to this post. I feel like it could have a lot more details and motivation/plot hooks. What was the accident? Maybe the PCs could be hired to investigate deaths at the lake by townspeople and hired to kill the beast. But later a druid asks them not to kill the beast but to lift its curse so it can be a normal bear again.
Voted valadaar
March 10, 2014, 15:06
This is interesting and evocative. I have used a similar idea in other submissions - that of reduced solidity.

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The devil's wind. Explains why people become crazy. They are caught up in this wind which steals their sanity which in turn feeds the wind. The wind is a leftover from when the air elementals banded together in a mass army at one point to attack the True Gods. The wind is leftover of their attack route and on the anniversary of the battle the wind sweeps through causing the madness.

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