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The Enori

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This unique animal is sought after by many a hunter and lord. Many knights have sought to gain fame by capturing this elusive, graceful animal for whom calling it a beast is a crime.

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The Enori was first sighted by the young hunter Alfon in the south of boundary forest. This animal was the most beautiful animal he had ever seen and would ever see in his long life.

It was the size of a large deer and was as strong as three. It possessed idilic white fur, hoofs that were as strong and fast as a horse’s and a long slender neck.

He approched the animal and it was compleatly calm and innocent. The rare creature was at ease in his company but then the hunter decided to capture this amazing creature to gain great fame, but it rebelled when it saw the man’s ill intent. Alfon’s senses deteriorated and distorted to the point that he could see sound. When he regained his senses night had fallen and the beast had long fled. The hunter left the wood and spent the rest of his life looking for the creature.

He never saw it again but many hunters to tried to find it. Some found it and gave chase but their horses could not out run it. once or twice the animal surrounded its mental power repelled anyone who got close.

It remains to this day the most sought after creature in the dukedoms surrounding the forest, dozens of knights have tried and failed to find the Enori, the name being the elvish for unreachable.

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The Enori’s innocence has faded and it will use its mental attack to shock any humanoid form that it sees. It leaves them stunned for at least an hour. The creature covers its tracks behind it and hides in the safest places in the forest with pleanty of cover. It leaves no scent.

It can be caught by using a drug that prevents it from using its mental power, or sneaking up and knocking the Enori out before they can run or fight. It is hard but it can be caught.



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axlerowes
September 14, 2006, 15:03
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Is the animal intelligent?

But I like the idea as whole, these animals could also be a form pest. Imagine your PCs are giving an ogre chase through the forest and accidently startle a heard of Enori.

This could also be a great tool for a DM desperate to keep their PCs from doing something stupid.
Cheka Man
September 14, 2006, 16:50
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How does the mental power work exactly? Is it like an electric eel's electricty?
Voted Pariah
September 14, 2006, 19:33
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Mmmrrrrmmm... It's all right. I'd kinda like to know how it came to be, but that's just me.
Voted CaptainPenguin
September 15, 2006, 0:52
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There is very, VERY little detail. It is an interesting idea, but what else is there to it?
How as the Enori's "innocence faded"? Why do people want to catch it so bad? Is it divine? It's unique, so where did it come from?
Voted Scrasamax
September 15, 2006, 6:57
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An interesting mix of unicorn, psioncist, and Arthurian Questing beast. Not bad but on the lean side for me as well.
Voted valadaar
September 15, 2006, 9:44
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I agree with Captain Penguin. Also, there are some pretty bad run-on sentances:

The hunter left the wood and spent the rest of his life looking for the creature he never saw it again but many hunters to try to find it and some saw it, but their horses could not out run it and its mental power repelled anyone who got close.
Voted MoonHunter
September 16, 2006, 9:39
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You do need to add the critter's origin to the write up.

How did the creatures innocence fade when the first time anyone saw it it was already corrupted? Should this of been a mythical creature of purity BEFORE, then changed due to events?

Is the creature the "King of the Forest?" or "King of the Herd" or just a creature who waunders?

You do need to check your posts before you put them up. Might I suggest C/P/C?
* Cut the post out,
* Put it into WORD or some other word processor
* Checking - running the spell and grammar checks.
* The cut the corrected version out and paste it back into the post.

Check out some of my advice here to improve your posts.
Voted axlerowes
May 12, 2011, 10:14
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I guess I never voted on this and it looks like it isn't going to change any. Despite all the flaws I do like the idea.
Voted RGTraynor
May 12, 2011, 13:24
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Voted Forganthus
February 7, 2013, 20:14
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I feel like this is a little too bare-bones for me. It's just a deer that has a brain attack. If it doesn't know you're there, you can still shoot an arrow into it. That doesn't sound so hard.

Honestly, I'm imagining it with a giant brain, like Mojo Jojo. Alternatively, it has no legs, and just hovers around the forest like a boss. Throw in some BS, like how elves believe that Enori are actually the souls of lost children, or that eating their brain while making mind flayer noises lets you use their brain powers for a couple of hours, and I think this could be a great little deer.

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