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The kadumish dwarves were not always a free people. In the days of old, the dragon men from the east engaged in a war over the Kadum mountains. The dragon men, who took control of the dragons, taming them and using them as steed, had a deadly advantage to the land bound dwarves.
The dragons were very agile, and dodged Balista bolt fire. The conquest ended rapidily. Hte dragon men had control. The dragon men, who in their tongue are called the Drania, acted as overlords to the conquered dwarves. THe dwarves were lessers, slaves. Every first born dwarvish child was offered to dragons as a sacrifice. All dwarves that revolted were burnt to a crisp. All those who tried to escape were captured and killed by the airborn sentries. It was a dark age for the dwarves.
Then, Dorathoin, a young dwarf who defied the dragon men, began a rebellion against them. First, minor skirmishes, in wich the dwarves suffered more. then nothing. Dorathoin new, no matter how powerfull the dwarves got, they would never defeat the dragon men. They could not go for aid because the sentries would slay all who tried to escape.
Dorathoin remembered how obsessed the dragon men were with their god, watever he allowed to happen was rule. So Dorathoin forged a mighty mace. Huge in size and power. He strode into the main temple, where stood the granite statue of their god. He unleashed in his wrath all the years of torment at their hand!!! The statue broke. The dragon men were filled with confusion and fear. they lost heart. The dwarves came to Dorathoin’s aid, slaying all the priests and the local sentries before they could mount.
THe dragon men lost heart and lost conquest. They left the Kadum mountains for good. Now, the banner of the dwarves is a mace smashing stone, as Dorathoin did. The mace can still be found in the great hall of the kings of Kadum. It is highly respected among all dwarves, even though it holds no magic.
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May 26, 2004, 21:53
All right. Symbol of the dwarven country.
Not bad. But if the dwarves are slaves and are kept under such tight guard, why was Dramothoin (Or Dorathoin, you didn't specify which) allowed to walk around with a "mighty" mace and go armed into the, presumably, extremely-important temple? Holes in the story make for a less compelling tale.
I accidentaly rated it 5/5 but I meant to give it...
3/5.
Better than most of your previous work, Elfy. Let's see you do more.
May 26, 2004, 22:21
May 27, 2004, 1:26
Well, the story has holes, and is not that well written, but
it is true that dwarves value history greatly. In one of my games they had a museum of tools and art, and every dwarven child saw the smithing hammer and carving tools of Lothat Stonesong, the re-founder of the city of Deepmir, which he used to create both items mundane and beautiful, that gave heart to the newly arrived settles.
so 3/5, but I guess it will get better :D
September 23, 2012, 11:27
September 23, 2012, 12:03