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Freeform Roleplaying / Re: something something...
« Last post by Murometz on August 09, 2016, 06:11:46 PM »
Woot! A chef!!

I guess my only question is, how are we pronouncing "chrom"? Crom? Ch'rome?
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Freeform Roleplaying / Re: something something...
« Last post by Tusserk on August 09, 2016, 02:30:00 PM »
Gilson "Four-Fingers" Chrom

Ship's cook, rarely seen leaving or boarding the ship. Most of the sailors assume that "Four-Finger" Chrom carries an ill-fate about him as he appears in the empty halls of the ship, only to vanish even faster and with no where to disappear in the twisting dead ends they tend to find him.

Hailing from Isle of Purple Towns, Gilson wears his slightly graying beard long and wild as is traditional with nearly all Sealords. He is missing  his index finger on his left hand, an "accident with a meat cleaver on his last ship" that has never been verified by any member of the crew. A large man with a decent amount of girth to his waist that is at odds with his ability to move throughout the ship and ports they visit while seemingly vanish without a trace. More than one of the crew has tried to follow the cook as he goes about his business of procuring food only to have him vanish into a blind alley. Most of the sailors whisper about his ability to perform magic, whether it is to turn invisible or to put out amazing dinners on a whim.
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Cartographer's Guild / Re: Here Be Tusserks... and Dragons
« Last post by Mageek on August 09, 2016, 12:02:31 AM »
Wench? Really?
You may be busy with life and work, but that isn't a reason to disrespect the master of the citadel.
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Sagely Advice / Re: urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by Moonlake on August 08, 2016, 08:31:36 PM »
Okay, I shall, Val.
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Sagely Advice / Re: urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by valadaar on August 08, 2016, 08:12:27 PM »
google the movie i mentioned - they use one and its set in ancientish china.
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Sagely Advice / Re: urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by Moonlake on August 08, 2016, 07:12:02 PM »
Thanks, guys, for the inputs. Strolen has given me a lot of pointers with this already through email (he was actually my first source of contact but I threw this out to the Citadel in case) cos he said he might not be available.

@Mageek, this is for a short story currently published as a serial for the Citadel epub for sale on Amazon (see link here: http://strolen.com/guild/index.php/board,124.0.html, just FYI)
@Val, Strolen has given much the same feedback and as of now, I'm compiling version 2 of the fighting sequence based on his feedback and one of the first changes would be that the bandits take out the carriage driver rather than hit the carriage with a volley of arrows and I'm also moving the fight scene outside of the carriage. Still trying to find a pic of an ancient Chinese carriage used by commoners for transportation usage though. Initial search was in English and got me nothing, new thinking is that maybe I should search in Chinese instead.
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Sagely Advice / Re: urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by valadaar on August 08, 2016, 11:54:23 AM »
Personally if I were the bandits, the attack would have started with a booby trap/deadfall to stop the carriage, not a volley of arrows.  Chasing a carriage on foot without some means to hobble it would not be a sound plan.

Given I had at least one archer, I would have them pelt the now stopped carriage, perhaps with fire arrows to flush them out into the open where more arrows would be followed up by a ground attack.

The Volley is problematic as you mention The Archer - who, unless he is superhuman, is not going to be able unleash a volley of arrows.

Being able to fight at all within the confines of a carriage light enough to be managed by a single horse seems nearly impossible.
Maybe with daggers and martial arts, but swords - I don't think so.  I would expect the interior of a single horse cart to be as cramped as the backseat of a car.

eg. http://www.carriagemart.com/pictures/pic3850.jpg

Friendly fire with swords would be almost assured.

You get a little more leeway if you have a larger vehicle drawn by a larger team. E.g. Stagecoach. Even then, it is extremely close quarters. No one is going to be able to simply slip past anyone unless they have been drawn out of the vehicle and left several feet of space. Perhaps if Meng was in one of those blade-to-blade struggles which took all of his attention...

There is a scene in Crouching Tiger Hidden Dragon Sword of Destiny where there is a battle about a carriage, but virtually none of the combat occurs inside.  Its just too d**n small.  I don't have a you tube link to it sadly.

If you want a battle with a vehicle serving as a mini fortress of sorts, a boat might work better.







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Sagely Advice / Re: urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by Mageek on August 07, 2016, 10:17:40 PM »
I recommend making top-down thumbnails indicating where everyone is in each "frame" of the fight.  You can also include critical items (like dropped weapons, etc).
What do the horses do after the carriage driver is killed? Is everything moving the whole time?
Also - is this for a DnD game or a book or something else?
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Sagely Advice / urgent help needed on a fighing sequence
« Last post by Moonlake on August 07, 2016, 03:16:07 AM »
I need help on ironing out a fighting sequence in terms of logistics and logic holes. Below I will try to give a synopsis of everything occurs and what I enclose in {} are the specific areas where I need help but if you see any other bits that won't stand to close scrutiny, please do tell me. Also, if there're bits where you think further details are required, please tell me also. I need to get this sequence making sense within the next 2 weeks preferably or 3 weeks max.

Here we go:
  • The 4 characters (2 warriors: Yin Jiao the Capn and Meng the junior; 2 mages: Xun Zhen the protagonist and ex-mentor Zhang) are travelling in a small horse drawn carriage with 2 doors on either ends. The width of the carriage is such that only one person can board at a time.
  • They are ambushed which starts with arrows that nearly got Zhang killed but Yin Jiao (the elder warrior/the Captain) shouts a warning in time for  the party to be not harmed by the arrows
  • Yin Jiao determines that there are about eight or nine ‘bandits’ from their footsteps and that two of them seem to be beyond the level of mere bandits. Therefore, he is cautious. He also thinks that they won’t be able to out-run the bandits with the driver they hired. It’s also not very realistic that he or Meng take over the reins because: 1) the two of them are good riders but not good carriage drivers; 2) the horse pulling the carriage isn’t even a good horse in the first place so it is doubtful that a better driver than any of the party plus the four of them can outrun the bandits with such a horse. So he chose to defend his two mage charges from within the inside of the carriage. This will make it easier to them to protect their charges as opposed to going out to the open when they are outnumbered.
  • For this plan of his to work, he needs to get rid of the archer first.  He manages to slay the archer {not sure how or alternatively how can I introduce the shock of a sudden attack without an archer?}.
  • The party’s layout within the carriage is now as follows: Meng is guarding the front door while Captain guards the back. The two mages are in the middle. The quarters are not spacious but there are enough rooms for the warriors to not have to deal with hindered movement within the carriage.
  • The bandits rush to board the carriage and one of them gets killed by the horse’s kicking him in panic (before the horse is killed in turn) but the bandits make short work of the carriage driver and then start boarding
  • At the front, Meng makes short work of several bandits. Then he hears noises and deduces that the bandits are boarding the rear as well
  • Over at the rear, the Capn is having some difficulty facing off against someone he determines as being definitely not a bandit but rather an assassin sent to sabotage their mission for political reasons but with the help of Xun Zhen, he manages to conquer his foe
  • Back to Meng. He has been forced to step back a few steps and now he is against another of the planted ‘bandit’ who is really an assassin with another sneaky bandit behind the assassin who’s been seizing opportunities to try to sneak small cuts to him. {Is this even possible within the small space within the carriage I described?}
  • Meng makes a slip and in order to correct for it, he turns sideways. This allows the bandit to dart behind him and get a chance at the 2 mages.
  • Meng turns around in panic, exposing his entire back to his opponent
  • {Where would be the Capn be now in terms of physical position relative to the bandit who rushed past Meng and the 2 mages? This depends on how many bandits are now left.  As currently written, the assumption is that there are no more coming from the door that Capn is guarding now i.e. only the 2 that Meng was facing, one of the 2 assassins mixed in with the bandits and 1 bandit who had darted past Meng. Given this, the threat is already over from the entrance guarded by Capn but the Capn is cautious in nature so he still stands guarding his entrance but been keeping eyes on Meng. This setup feasible? }
  • Capn rushes forward and past Meng to take the fatal cut meant for Meng. He does this instead of rushing for the 2 mages in danger because exhaustion has overtaken him and at that moment he happened to be looking at Meng and saw the fatal danger for him so he just acted, didn’t really think.
  • The Capn gets fatally injured whilst clinging to Meng’s back and eventually traps the assassin’s broadsword within his own body {Is this realistic? Can one trap a broadsword within one’s body with repeated injury? Isn’t this only feasible with a dagger?}
  • Meng turns back around upon feeling weight of Capn sliding off his back and then kills assassin in rage
  • Over to the 2 mages. The bandit was about to kill Zhang with a slash but Xun Zhen pushed his mentor out of the way and got a cut on his hand instead.
  • Meng has now turned back towards the bandit who rushed past him and catching the last of the sequence detailed in dot point above, he rushes forward and slays the bandit.

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Fields of Challenge / Re: Freetext Friday
« Last post by Dragonlordmax on August 05, 2016, 09:54:49 PM »
No, I haven't retired, I'm just struggling to remain as reliable these days. This is just kind of slipping on my list of stuff to do on Fridays. I need to actually get back into writing my own submissions, too. That would help, I think.

I do really like the Digital Angel sub. Top notch.

For this week, let's do Amazon. Warrior women, babes from outer space, or perhaps women fighting on some more metaphorical battlefield.
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