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500 Word NPC Challenge
« on: January 29, 2015, 11:45:17 AM »
I like to cook, and I like to watch cooking shows. I don't care for the professional chef in the studio kitchen, smiling through money shots of pasta and precooked fare, I like the cooking competition shows. Your ingredients are limited, and even more so, your time is limited.

I want to create that with the 500 Word NPC challenge.

There are two limitations: The submission cannot exceed 500 words and the NPC in question must be an assassin. (cue groans from the chefs and wild cheers from the audience)

Submissions should use the Freetext NPC500, and Assassin, and I will get with Strolen about making a badge for this challenge.

Let's see those Dual-wielding drow, Ezio clones, and professional hitmen.

(I'll also send the winner a pair of socks, because I work in a sock factory)
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #1 on: January 29, 2015, 11:47:31 AM »
If you can figure out how to do it, feel free to use 1 (limit 1) picture in your submission
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #2 on: January 29, 2015, 06:38:47 PM »
http://strolen.com/viewing/Elainuk_Parnas_Dark_Elf_Assassin



DARK ELF ASSASSIN

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« Last Edit: January 29, 2015, 09:24:28 PM by axlerowes »

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #3 on: January 29, 2015, 06:59:47 PM »
If you would like, you flesh out one of these folks http://strolen.com/viewing/30_Assassins
   
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #4 on: January 29, 2015, 07:01:52 PM »
500 words??? *sob*

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #5 on: January 30, 2015, 04:23:02 PM »
Count me in and I will eventually produce one Chinese assassin specimen. Having said that, I'm still owing 2 on Goss' spouse challenge but I always deliver eventually. So count me in as a participant but forget about me as winner (I prob. won't win anyway).

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #6 on: January 30, 2015, 09:37:01 PM »
But... but... 500 words?

Look... by 500 words I've just barely finished the introductory summary of the character. Why doesn't someone make a 5,000 word challenge?

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #7 on: January 30, 2015, 09:43:42 PM »
The answer is probably that a sub of such length is running at risk of being under-read. To be honest, I love works of length in real life but reading works of length on a PC monitor is an altogether different matter.

Shorter word limit challenge is also more challenging I think b/c of the word count. Absolutely no room for unnecessary words. Then again, I guess this is not the challenge for developing characters with great complex backgrounds and multi-layered innuendoes.

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #8 on: January 30, 2015, 09:51:11 PM »
I'm mostly just funning. I know I have developed a rep for long works. :P

I'll see if I can cut 9 words out of 10 for something I was working on and squeeze it to fit. :P

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #9 on: January 30, 2015, 10:31:12 PM »
Good for you, I have to start from scratch with just a name and a semi-fuzzy background but at least this challenge merged with one of these idea snippets floating around my head.

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #10 on: January 31, 2015, 10:44:58 AM »
I had seen this idea but hadn't read it and was considering something. At first read assassin  and thought no way. But it totally fits now that I think about it!Challenge accepted! I'm going to do a spin on the Solomon Grundy post(sorry can't remember who wrote that,I think it was a Moon)
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #11 on: January 31, 2015, 12:08:13 PM »
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #12 on: February 01, 2015, 12:23:57 AM »
Buluc, death priest of Rope Woman.

500 words, from preview to finish.
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #13 on: February 01, 2015, 08:00:35 PM »
I want to do one too. Can someone select on my http://strolen.com/viewing/30_Assassins for me to flesh out? :)
   
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #14 on: February 01, 2015, 08:09:44 PM »
I'm partial to Shooga Moak, but let's see Ildran Motaer under the bright lights!
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #15 on: February 01, 2015, 08:10:32 PM »
Used a random number generator for 1-31
http://www.mathgoodies.com/calculators/random_no_custom.html
I got a 22

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #16 on: February 01, 2015, 08:19:19 PM »
I think I had a bright idea for the next 500, what about you have to take an idea seed from somebody else? We could pick a category or open it up to anything

?????
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #17 on: February 01, 2015, 08:23:57 PM »
 
I think I had a bright idea for the next 500, what about you have to take an idea seed from somebody else?

Sounds fun and also give excuse for mining the idea seeds. Go ahead and open up a new thread with it.

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #18 on: February 02, 2015, 08:44:27 AM »
I think I had a bright idea for the next 500, what about you have to take an idea seed from somebody else? We could pick a category or open it up to anything

?????

That'll be something worth discussing once Strolen has this server migration taken care of
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #19 on: February 02, 2015, 02:41:23 PM »
Couldn't help myself... started getting inspired from reading the other entries. Blend that with a discussion yesterday with MH and CM about Murder Hobo adventurers (Disney needs to buy up Hasbro and make a "How to Train Your Murder Hobo" movie :P )

I hereby present Mark Greaves, Assassin Hobo for your consideration.
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #20 on: February 02, 2015, 02:53:49 PM »
BTW, I want to thank you, Scras, for getting me to reconsider what a complete idea means. I've gotten so caught up in making sure that I cover all the bases in my subs that I got a little lost. This was a good exercise, even though part of me was itching to further define the curse, what exact events led Mark into the assassin biz, etc.
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #21 on: February 03, 2015, 12:26:07 AM »
BTW, I want to thank you, Scras, for getting me to reconsider what a complete idea means. I've gotten so caught up in making sure that I cover all the bases in my subs that I got a little lost. This was a good exercise, even though part of me was itching to further define the curse, what exact events led Mark into the assassin biz, etc.

I think that in a way we've gotten away from ideas and have gotten caught up in presentation. I don't need to know who made the watch, I don't need to know where it came from, and who owned it before me, those things are nice, but ultimately unimportant when all I need is to know what time it is.

I cannot count the number of times I've gotten bogged down in a submission and just dropped it because trying to hit certain presentation points and answering demanded but unimportant questions I lose the original idea. Backstory is important, but it's not vital. So many characters can have long, overly elaborate and complex backstories that are very easily abridged.

Batman: Bruce Wayne spends his formative years learning how to overcome his fear and how to fight the sort of crime that lead to him witnessing his parent's murder. He balances a daytime life as a Billionaire CEO playboy and a nighttime life as a masked vigilante. He has a bat theme.

Simple, to the point, and you can run with it.
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #22 on: February 03, 2015, 08:34:44 AM »
BTW, I want to thank you, Scras, for getting me to reconsider what a complete idea means. I've gotten so caught up in making sure that I cover all the bases in my subs that I got a little lost. This was a good exercise, even though part of me was itching to further define the curse, what exact events led Mark into the assassin biz, etc.

I think that in a way we've gotten away from ideas and have gotten caught up in presentation. I don't need to know who made the watch, I don't need to know where it came from, and who owned it before me, those things are nice, but ultimately unimportant when all I need is to know what time it is.

I cannot count the number of times I've gotten bogged down in a submission and just dropped it because trying to hit certain presentation points and answering demanded but unimportant questions I lose the original idea. Backstory is important, but it's not vital. So many characters can have long, overly elaborate and complex backstories that are very easily abridged.

Batman: Bruce Wayne spends his formative years learning how to overcome his fear and how to fight the sort of crime that lead to him witnessing his parent's murder. He balances a daytime life as a Billionaire CEO playboy and a nighttime life as a masked vigilante. He has a bat theme.

Simple, to the point, and you can run with it.
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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #23 on: February 03, 2015, 06:44:55 PM »
Hoping to wrap up mine tmr. will see how it goes.....

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Re: 500 Word NPC Challenge
« Reply #24 on: February 05, 2015, 01:25:08 AM »

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