Downloaded and looked through a bit...
Well, what should I say... it's big. It's too BIG. It is simply too long! Two issues would be much better.
Hmmm... of course, graphics; dragon theme; kobolds... much about kobolds, neat; drow...; ohh... EXCREMENTAL PARAELEMENTAL...

...and...and...and...
It is TOO MUCH. Cannot make a 'comment' on a small book you in fact published after simply going it through. May do some later.
See but some interesting things already...