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Knooble Glitio
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CaptainPenguin's comment on 2004-10-23 02:20 PM
*yawn*

The background is boring, the character is the cliche gnome inventor.

How this could be improved-
Change it up. Is ever gnome crazy and tinkers with stuff? Why? Why do they all have flying machines? Why do they always end up as the most comical of races, what with strange names (Knooble, the Flying Gopher, Nubbins) and ridiculous ways?

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Scrasamax's comment on 2004-10-23 07:04 AM
I've got a flying machine!
WHEEEEE!

Okay, that being said, the gnomish inventor with a flying machine is now about as original, and interesting as the black clad Drow assassin, or barbarian orc. There has to be something that can be done to reinvigorate the gnomish archtype.

What about a half drunk, swaggering, savvy air pirate, or perhaps a gnomish captain who wins engagement after engagement through careful and meticuluous planning and execution and build a cult of personality about himself. Dispense with the silly names!

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Scrasamax's comment on 2010-11-02 09:52 AM
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EchoMirage's comment on 2004-10-23 07:35 AM
Well yes, you get one in Icewind Dale 1, you get the same chap in Icewind Dale 2, and another mad gnomish inventor in Baldur's Gate 2, why couldn't we get one in the citadel too? Go to Comment
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EchoMirage's comment on 2004-10-24 04:55 AM
Well, it could be due to a neurological imbalance (say, increased secretion of a neurotransmitter, altered function of ion channels - increased excitability - or a different pattern of interaction between neurons.
Their brains may be constantly searching for new stimuli, thus their drive to discover new and even more new stuff increases, but their ability to concentrate changes in the process. Alos, the ridiculous ways may come from the desire to be different, or an inherent inability to adapt to the ways of others (so, they might be slightly autistic, or solipsist - the only ways that are real and thus relevant are HIS).
The strange (and not so serious) names may be a defense mechanism - they are meant to make the enemies underestimate the gnome, or laugh and humiliate instead of harming him. Go to Comment
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Cheka Man's comment on 2009-01-23 09:03 PM
Maybe one day I'll make something of it. Go to Comment
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Michael Jotne Slayer's comment on 2010-11-02 07:53 AM


Yeah, they were a bit hard. But back then, it was that way we commented. A lot has changed since then.

 



If an admin could attach the silly tag? That would be sweet.


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Dozus's comment on 2014-02-04 09:24 AM
I'm glad Ramhir said what he said. Waz hasn't logged on since shortly after this sub, and I wonder if comments like those drove some of our new Citadellians away.

That said, this sub definitely needed work. It was a very basic, if well-written, gnome inventor/pilot guy. Something to set him apart would be nice. Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2009-01-23 11:58 AM
If we ever have that suggested "Take a silly thing and expand it into something good" Quest, this sub would qualify for usage. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2014-02-04 02:24 PM
Frankly, I've seen much worse, and its unfortunate that this author essentially quit after this submission.

I agree with Dozus.

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Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-02 08:43 AM
Then I'm glad this is now, not then. I wouldn't like to critique like that, nor be a fish swimming against the current. Go to Comment
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Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-02 02:35 AM


I agree with everything you said, but I wonder if we were a little hard on him. It is usually a good thing, particularly with new posters, that, in addition to critiquing them, we also find something good to say. That's been my experience as a Creative Writing teacher. Something like:



Welcome. It's good to get fresh ideas. You showed good enthusiasm, but your subject was kind of cliched. After all, mad gnomish inventors with their flying machines are very common. You would probably do better if you hit 'Edit' under your sub and tried to come up with something new and different, such as ........



What do you think? I agree that it wasn't very good, but if he never comes back, he'll never get any better. Don't we have a duty to encourage as well as critique? Or is my teacher mode getting the best of me?

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