This is fantastic, I completely enjoyed reading it. The voice you used gives us another lay of information on top of the list of facts: we get to see these people in context. Plus the sinister considerations of the narrator add a layer of risk, suspense and intrigue to the piece. The structure is also excellent. Well done makes me want to read more.Go to Comment
"What other magical vestments might we pair this with?"
1. Hat of Sudden Items
Whenever the wearer tips the hat in greeting or salute, out pops whichever last item the cloak's thieving hands stole and "pocketed", usually leading to embarrassment or worse, for the wearer.
2. Boots of the Getaway
two additional shadowy boots emerge from this footwear, whenever the cloak's hands steal something. These phantom boots kick the shins of the cloak's latest victim, as hard as possible.
Sorry, I'm just having fun with this :DGo to Comment