Unless you slog through all the free-text linked things, you have no idea about who The Lord is. Some introductory text about these three races would be nice.
These should of been three different posts linked by a codex, or at minimum a scroll (introduction being the king post), each race being its own scroll post.
Context and explantion is needed.
They seem to be minor races, yet you marked them as PC races... so we need more information about them and what their society (or their part in the larger society) is like.
While I am not against short postings by any stretch, this post is more a short hand listing for people who already know what is going on.
Yeah. I didn't like leaving it that way, but I have not worked out the full direction I am going to finish that story with. So, for now, I am trying to find time to describe Ishtar and it's scenarios.
Also, I'm working alot lately, and really don't have as much time as I would like to write. I shall, however, nail this out; hopefully you will like it. Go to Comment
Well, I like this beginning. It definitely shows promise. And whilst I'm not sure if it was intended or if it'll be noticed if this isn't said, I can see some definite Biblical (Or rather, Torah-cal) influence in some of the stories. It shows some promise, but it seems unfinished. Part D is a small paragraph and just cuts out mid-thought. It's like you just up and left the keyboard.
Once 'tis modified further, the vote may or may not change. But don't be discouraged, I definitely think it shows potential. Go to Comment
I'm glad you liked it. I needed to add one more detail, though. Just forgot to put in the curse column why Ammoggon's power failed him in his final battle. Go to Comment
Updated: Been gone a while and figured I would clean-up this up as requested. My first attempt was just to get an idea on paper; so it was a little messy. Go to Comment
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Guys, Strom has not been here in a really long time. You can vote now and hopefully edit your vote later (if Strolen has fixed that bug). Go to Comment
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Perhaps we could have a small R.I.P note next too the names of those that has not logged on for a year or so? Anyway, I produce a 3.0 for a good solid idea.
Perhaps one day it may be expanded. Go to Comment
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A neat idea - they're very powerful, but their sometimes unwanted nature makes them balanced as well as seeding the ground for many potential quests. However, a little backstory would be nice, and I would like a way to combat them - for instance, If a PC wishes death upon a friend in heat, and refuses the offer, he should not become a lost cause. Also, is the society led by a person (with meetings and messages and such), or is it divinely controlled by the influence of a God (who organizes them subconsciously)?
I haven't voted yet, so if you want to elaborate I'll wait. A cool start, but (I) want to see more! Go to Comment
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