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The Plink
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MoonHunter's comment on 2007-08-16 11:03 AM
The idea is interesting, but the write up is disjointed.

To make this better, you should "block out" each section. Each section should have its own purpose (something to specifically explain or express). You should then order those blocked section into a pattern than makes the most sense. Ideally each section would lead to the next one, or you could use headers.


The point of view and "narration" changes. Who is telling us this information (an informed scientific narrator? omnicient deity? some fantasy scholar?

Now why aren't they using animals?
Do people not notice the oozing material out of the corpse? Can't they be infected when they touch it?

How did people get the idea about this communicaiton method? Go to Comment
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Maggot's comment on 2007-04-21 12:13 AM
The concept is solid, but perhaps a little more description about the process that birth them would be great, as would the greater elaboration into the numerous beliefs that humans have formed about them. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2014-01-24 09:57 AM
This is a strange one. Mystical space virus that is a million years old, intelligent, and then just kills people.

Why? The why is left off, so all that is left are fake diamonds that kill people.

There is something here, but it seems very much blunted. Go to Comment
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Jarons20's comment on 2009-04-14 12:20 PM
This reminds me of the gray goo nightmare scenario that people think will happen with nanobots.
I like the flicker flash or sparkle idea and the way they burrow into a person.
Is there a cure to the infection or any other symptoms such as hardening of the skin, a sheen to the hair, sparkles in the eye?

5-8-09
Ooo, sparkly eyes as a symptom "Plink Eye"

Also, could that tune that you wrote of be reversed or a code could actually be the cure Go to Comment
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-22 01:43 PM


The only issue I have here is that the Plink breaks up upon being touched. If it's broken, how does it reproduce? If it's a molecular chain and that's all, it can't have any intelligence. It sounds more like a bacterial colony than anything else, perhaps a fungus? If you want to make it a semi-intelligent life form, the best way to do it might be to say that the Plink burrows in through a pore, and floats around in the bloodstream, before lodging itself into the bone marrow. Because a creature that breaks up and then reproduces doesn't make much sense, at least not to me, unless it breaks up and reassembles itself inside the body as a creature, rather than a molecule. That's just my take. Other than this, good jorb.


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