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NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
valadaar's comment on 2009-01-11 10:33 AM
Hmm, There is a few interesting points, but the execution of this one is not as good as your first. There are spelling errors (hart instead of heart), far too few commas. I would suggest reading this sub outloud to yourself, only pausing or breathing on commas or punctuation.

Marginally is misspelled in your summary - the worst place to misspell text since it is the first text people will read.

The collection of eyeballs is quite unique :P Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2009-01-11 01:23 PM
I think it's a great idea, but... I have to agree with Val. More details about the books creation could make this even better. There are also a few grammar/spelling errors that make it tricky to read. Everyone starts somewhere, don't get discouraged.

All in all, solid first post. Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Maggot's comment on 2009-01-11 09:34 AM
Cheka raised a good point. After absorbing countless recordings of mundane discoveries, you'd expect the pages within the book to get so numerous as to make the book a cumbersome and heavy affair. Will that be the case evantually? Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Cheka Man's comment on 2009-01-11 09:15 AM
Does the book end up getting too heavy to carry? Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2009-01-11 10:24 AM
No, thats addressed by the following:

Since the spell created an infinite number of pages within the book the ones not in use are stored elsewhere the book always maintains a constant number of pages between the covers of the book.

If it was truly infinite in the material world, it would collapse into super black hole and destroy the world. Thank goodness for extra dimensional spaces. And, where would you get all the trees???? :P Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2009-01-11 10:27 AM
Not bad, but it would be interesting to see where the knowledge to create this potent item came from. I could see an arch-mage or other obviously powerful or knowledgeable being creating an infinite book, but a young boy? Did a supernatural power take interest? Did he find some aged tome of magic? I think these details could help strengthen the sub and add more hooks!

A good first post nightmareshadow! Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
nightmareshadow's comment on 2009-01-11 03:16 PM
Updated: Alright following some advice i have included some information about the enchantment that powers the book. Go to Comment
Book of Eternity
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-09 06:28 PM
Would have given a 4 except for the fact that I don't quite understand the section on the downside of sectioning (do you mean there's no index within particular sections so you just have to flip through a whole section to find a particular page? if so, the description as it currently is is a bit ambiguous) so 3.5. Go to Comment
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