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Golden Golem
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manfred's comment on 2014-03-28 05:03 PM
If there is enough gold to make these regularly, you can bet the local king will keep one of these as a sort of bodyguard, just to show off. Although locals keep mumbling that it's actually a copper golem with some golden paint on... Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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Cheka Man's comment on 2014-03-25 02:25 AM
Can they see properly? 5/5 Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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Dozus's comment on 2014-03-24 09:30 PM
The overall idea is eminently practical - a walking deposit box. The profile face thing is pretty clever, too. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-24 12:44 PM
Nice item/creature, clear cut visuals and just the hint of a story...just a hint. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-24 01:11 PM


The partial story stands out a bit cause you lead with it in the teaser and open with it in the body of the piece. So going into the piece it appears like that is going to be the focus, but then it gets left behind.



I like the coin face idea. Also you should tack monster-of-the-week on to this

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Golden Golem
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mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-24 12:48 PM
Meh, didn't want to create a story where one did not really exist. The focus was on the creature. I gave it enough of a back-story that if you are asked by a player you can explain where they came from. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-24 01:49 PM
That makes sense. Thanks for the input.

If something come to me I'll add it in. I do not want to force it though. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-30 01:35 PM
This was going to be one of the first things I added if I did add anything...now I'm fresh out of new ideas for it. Good job :P Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-30 09:54 PM
Wasn't sure if this was a serious question...figured I'd answer it anyway.

I always figured Golems don't need to see...they sort of rely on their superiors for instruction. I'll leave that for the GM's...might be interesting to have it lose you if you stand right in front of it Go to Comment
Golden Golem
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Kassy's comment on 2014-03-27 01:01 PM
3.5/5

Pretty much what axelrowes has already said. Definitely a nice sub though :) Go to Comment
Bird Brains
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Strolen's comment on 2014-01-26 01:17 AM
Fun idea. I would call it Fuzzy Biology. Magic with a twist of science.

I did get a little confused about how it works. Not sure the bird seeing the imperfections would help when everything else the bird does is through sense and a little magic. That part felt out of place with the rest.

And I agree it is a great way to allow communication with limits. Not everything has to be hardcore magic!
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Bird Brains
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Murometz's comment on 2014-01-27 02:36 PM


It's weird but in a good way. I'll echo Strolen re: birds gauging the imperfections. Also, don't most birds have great vision? Hmm, now I'm not sure, and need to know.



I like the Author's Note! :)

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Bird Brains
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valadaar's comment on 2014-02-04 06:58 AM
A decent magic item - more atmospheric and plot-usable then spells that just transmit the message. Good.

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Bird Brains
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mrcelophane's comment on 2014-01-26 03:35 PM
The idea was that there was some code built into the imperfections. As someone who spends a lot of time with computers, I felt there had to be some form of programming built into the gems... Though enchanted gems that call to each other work just as well. Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
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valadaar's comment on 2013-08-26 10:36 AM
Very good - she has a lot of uses, and reminds me of the Vivisectionist in the Thieves World.

Given the nature of many ancient cultures, her treatment of condemned prisoners is not that unbelievable.

I also think she must have been pretty close to being off her rocker to start with :) Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
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mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-20 04:16 PM
It all depends on when they meet her. It is only when she becomes bored with one method that she moves to another, like her garden. If early on, she is still using traditional methods. It isn't until she is older that she tries experimental things, like mixing hope into the screams by setting up SAW like scenarios where prisoners think they can earn their freedom.


What I mean to say by this is that she really does not have a signature torture method, or wouldn't really.  Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
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mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-21 01:11 PM
Just printed out the page and started editing again. While there are some that were missed, a good majority I remember seeing and either forgot to fix or did and forgot to save.

Either way, thanks for the input. Happy to see I was able to score so high even with so many grammatical errors present Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
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mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-28 03:04 PM
>The one thing I'm not sure of is how she manages to get away with so much. With all the witnesses to her arena, including the ones who decided never to come back, her level of cruelty must at least be whispered about.

Except for the two occasions mentioned, she comes across only as an old woman who enjoys entertaining. In her setting, gladiatorial matches are not that uncommon, and hers are a unique pleasure.

In hindsight, I suppose this is a rather large jump to assume, because it does not take place in Ancient Rome. That said, many fantasy setting have gladiators.

As for prisoners: not many people are going to follow up on those. Maybe the family would ask, but I don't think it was too uncommon for prisoners to die.

Tl;dr: Most don't really see the cruelty, and PC's would have to do quite a bit of digging to find out about anything weird. Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
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MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-25 07:49 PM

I am very glad you went with the Lady Delores over your original Lord Briggs idea. She may be an old woman who worries about getting dirt on her dress but she's a hell of a lot scarier.


Her story is tragic, of course. You never quite know how people will change under that kind of trauma. But then again, maybe she would have developed that side anyway, and James got off lucky.


The tiny arena is creative, horrifying, and really a little bit funny (albeit in a macabre way.) I kinda want to find a way to use that.


The one thing I'm not sure of is how she manages to get away with so much. With all the witnesses to her arena, including the ones who decided never to come back, her level of cruelty must at least be whispered about. In addition, I can't imagine her treatment of the prisoners could be kept completely secret, since so many disappear in her care. I suppose this wouldn't matter if the nobility have carte blanche to do such things, but part of her charm for me is the nonthreatening old lady shtick as a front for secretly being the scariest person around.

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Lady Delores Briggs
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Gossamer's comment on 2013-08-21 11:07 AM
Well, this is a tough one. On the one hand it is riddled with typos and grammatical errors, to the point that it stopped the flow of the text altogether at times. But that being said, I have to say that I love this idea, of the dining room sized arena. So I'm glad I read it.

I would still urge you strongly to spellcheck it, it's a very good sub and it really deserves that extra love and care. I would also suggest that you read this post;

http://strolen.com/guild/index.php/topic,3933.msg77707.html#msg77707

As you seem to have trouble differentiating between there and their, among other things. Go to Comment
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