Solid submission. It has plenty of detail in all the right places, it just seems so... normal. It is exactly what the sub is called. A Seaman's Fruit, and nothing else. A fun bit of fluff and sure to be included in a seafaring game, but not much else. Go to Comment
I'm cool with non-magical fruit, but exploring some more of the social construct of the fruit would be interesting. Recipes, old wives tales, the fruit as a symbol for something (health? safe journeys?), etc. It's the little things. Go to Comment
If a move away from 'normalcy' is desired, perhaps they can be slightly adjusted.
The first line for example gave me an idea.
"And make sure the fruit stays dry."
What if this particular fruit's rind/skin is so strong/dense that it is for all intents and purposes, waterproof for a considerable period of time. Dropped a cask of seaman's fruit overboard? Fear not! Not only are they waterproof, but they float! And since fish have not yet found citrus to their tastes, they are salvageable! Slight twist, but suddenly the fruit's market value takes a bump. Think tennis balls with nutritional value :)
Also, another idea. What if a 'side-effect' is that having dropped many seaman's fruits overboard over the years, sailors have noticed something peculiar. Fish in general, and sharks in particular, seem averse to the pungent citrus oil and acids, seeping from this fruit's rind. Sharks that usually follow ships looking for scraps, seem less inclined to swim in water peppered with these fruit?
Experimenting, some sailors smeared seaman's fruit juice on their bodies when diving, snorkeling, or cleaning the hull, and noticed a slight (obviously not fool-proof) aversion from nosy sharks. Though the salt-water washes the fruit's juice away obviously, enough citrus aroma is left in the water for sometime to have a small effect. Others have taken to tying necklaces of seaman's fruit around their necks or ankles when diving. Hang enough of them, and you even have a makeshift baby-buoy. Go to Comment
Perhaps this would be better part of a scroll - it seems a little bare here on it's own. Perhaps some more whimsical tales, falsehoods or usages would help. Muros additions being an example of that. Go to Comment
The flowers would of course wither and even die. But that doesn't mean that
a) somebody with the skill couldn't learn to distill exactly these 'bad vibes' the plant picked up and use it for something nasty, or
b) there is not a plant, a dark mirror of this one, that actually thrives on the bad feelings, useful for the same Go to Comment
Much discussion followed this one in chat. Muro suggested a multitude of uses for trickster-types, to which I responded that it didn't have to respond immediately to changes in emotion. Sure negative emotions could hurt it quickly, but the positive ones could take a while to change it. Just a way to limit these from being much more than nifty background fluff. Go to Comment
I simply love the concept of this flower existing as part of the ecology. The practical applications can vary with campaigns. Perhaps most don't respond quickly, but perhaps some other, hybrid strains, do react quickly to emotional stimulae. Either way, fascinating flower! Go to Comment
Yay! A good old fashioned sub about a fascinating lifeform saddled with a wealth of fascinating detail!! A ceature that seemlessly fits its world.
1) plant eaters (or giant locusts more like it :))
2) beautiful line-- they gather around spirit wells*, with the males dueling in air for the females, displaying fine acrobatics and fighting for their attention. The winners get to bathe in the empowered waters, soaking up the energies needed to spawn another generation with all the females they can handle.
3) The Calvinus line :)
4) that true dragons may be their offspring. You would expect that the mighty ones would have birthed these inferior drakelings, but no! Your way is cooler! Go to Comment
While the actual drakes are interesting and there is much detail, I found the way it was written distracting. One topic would jump to the next with no seeming connection, and the sentences seem to be fragmented and jumbled. However, I much appreciate the 'Summary and other details' section, but I have a question: you say that anyone asking too many questions is a spy, is that because everyone else would already know about them? Go to Comment