Aside from the new approach to the subject, the philosophical aspects of being opened and closed this is just okay. The concentration of self and closure of personal essence being the cause of vampires lacking shadows or reflections is interesting, though. Go to Comment
I like this sorcerous approach to vampires a lot. Its not for everyone, nor is it useful for all standard applications of vampires, but its a cool variant. I see myself using this approach as a group of vampiric magi in my Arabian style campaign.
That said, it really should be expanded more. Seems like you're already working on that though. Go to Comment
Nice location, the adventure hooks make it especially easy to drop into any campaign. It woudl be nice to have a little back story exactly why the sharks congregate around the island, and what brought about the tradition against killing them. (Something most pc's would ask as soon as they heard of the tradition)
Also replacing "country x" with a fictional name would help make the piece feel more flowing and less rigid. Go to Comment