Actually it is not a wizard made blade. Per the story it was made by and Elven Knight and a Mage. As for the D&D lingo, it is there for anyone that needs it if they'd like to use the item for a character in a D&D Campaign. Example spells are just that and up to DM discretion so no sense explaining.
"After one such conversation they decided to work together on something that could turn the tide against such creatures and Shadows Curse was her name."
The item is powerful but only gains its benefit through slaying incorporeal creatures. Charges used can only be replenished through the wielder slaying (delivering the killing blow) to an incorporeal creature. Essentially the player character in my campaign that has this blade uses the abilities sparingly mainly because there aren't incorporeals floating around everwhere for the purposes of recharging.
I see that you have reformatted the weapons effects and the tale m0s0g. Well, I think your efforts paid off. There is one thing I would like to comment, and that occured during the fight. Kelendul fought the wraiths, these are your words:
"Calling upon his sword he swung again but missed. So to did his opponent. This went on for several minutes until he defeated the creature"
Did you get tired of describing the situation? It seems like you like Salvatore (from your comments). Would you like if Drizzt "defeated his enemies after a several minute long combat", or would you like the whole drama?
4/5 Go to Comment
Thanks but no thanks.
Could you translate from D&D for us? What does Dimension Door do? What is Wraith Form? What is a CR?
Story's okay, I guess, no complaints there, 'cept that it's just a wizard-made blade.
So-so, overall, so I vote...
Well! What an interesting response! I don't think I've ever garnered such passion before.
Didn't mean to, I swear.
I don't understand why he's so angry with me. It got a 3/5. That's average. That's fine. I've gotten plenty of 3/5s before, and probably just as many 2/5s.
Oh well. To each his own. Go to Comment
I wasn't telling you what your story was- I was reading your story, and telling you something about it that I didn't like, which is that it was magicked up. Why could it not be something more mythical? How did the knight and wizard collaborate?
Ah, whatever. It doesn't matter anyway- you think your right, I think I'm right, and nothing that can be said will now fix it. Go to Comment
Though I will admit that the captain does do things a little harshly, critisism is the best way for someone to improve themselves. And to get no critisism from Captainpenguin is a difficult task indeed - its practically his mission to seek out any little thing that is wrong with it and bicker on it ;)
So this is what I say
To the Captain: A little construction in that critisism would help keep members around :P
To M0s0g: Dont take the captains ramblings to heart, and understand that not everyone posts a perfect post every time. Learn from this and move on, experiment with new posts. This site is here for information and entertainment, so have fun with it. Go to Comment
Later all. Don't need this when may interest was to share my creations/interests for the benefit of others.
I wrote the story and it hints to the fact that the main characters worked together on the item. Did you fail reading comprehension in grade school? Must I spell it out for you? Who do you think you are anyway? What great works have you written that make you the authority? Perhaps you should keep you opinions to yourself unless they are "helpful" to others.
Perhaps I got a little carried away, bad day but I was a bit ticked by Captain's response. Here was someone telling me what my item background meant. I could have put up the full 4 page write-up but felt the one page explained everything necessary. When I tried to point out the key line that suggested the key people who created the item I was essentially told I don't know my own story. Well, that came off like a slap in the face which is something I don't take lightly especially when I am already at my boiling point due to other variables. I have no objection to criticism of my work and appreciate views that help me improve upon my stuff, however, I do take offense to someone degrading my efforts and over exerting their opinion as fact. This was not a situation where Captain knew the material so for him to say I don't know my own story was like someone tell Salvatore (who has far more ability then myself in story telling) that he has Drizzt all wrong.
As Echo said, sometimes we bring an idea to bear, one that we have nurtured and see with the blind eye of a mother and her favored child. This is the grandest idea, it is unique and original, and oh so wonderful. You should all be inspired by my creativity, and fawn praise upon me for my excellence. (Yes, I am guilty of this)
Then we get our teeth kicked in. Blah, boring, not bad but it has flaws, negative comments, mediocre to low scores. The first reaction is anger, how dare they disrespect my creation! Ingrates, blind to my talent! Some people terminate accounts, or just vanish, never posting again. Others realize that there is ALWAYS room to grow, always room to improve.
I have had my teeth rattled (Amulet of Moloch, The Kitjan, and the deleted Boerog (ranked a 1.6)) and I didnt like it. Did I get mad? You bet I did. Did I throw a tantrum, and storm off? No, not really. I came back and learned from my mistakes, and try to do better on the next time around.
I guess dear mOsOg was over-reacting ... some of my posts I thought earth-shattering and great recieved 3s and so on ... yes, I was not happy, but then, by posting an item here, I subject it to the judgment of others, whatever it may beGo to Comment
Perhaps we should all post statistics from our chosen systems?
It would be perfect chaos!
I will translate the spells for you:
Dimension Door: This spell creates a shimmering door that will transport you to another location in the vicinity.
Wraith Form: This spell transforms the caster temporarily into a gaseous cloud. Beware the wind...
Summon Shadow: This spell summons one of the undead, a shadow, to fight for the wielder of the blade.
Yes, but you didn't have to do it. This post was reasonably good. And if we deleted all the posts that people wanted deleted, all of Luke's posts and a few others would be gone as well. They normally go off in a huff and come back a few months later. Go to Comment
Upon entering the deep underrealm of Udnalor, one must first pass through the upper halls, which were the residences of the gnomes in days of past glories. Now they have abandoned the fading tapestries to the worms and moles, and an uncanny silence reigns, laid over the oaken tables like the thick layers of dust and humus.
There may be creatures which now inhabit these areas: nests livid with giant maggots, rats and other vermin.
The watchtowers and passageways which lead to the Overground are frequently trodden, however. After all it takes a great many small humanoids to hoist a single giant rabbit corpse back through the fathoms of earth.
The gnomes primarily hunt giant rabbits with bows and arrows tipped with the subterranean poisons concocted by their best alchemists.