Quite nice - a new twist on the "forbidden forest". The reason for it is well explained and there is something quite spooky about intelligent beautiful poisonous dragonflies being the reincarnation of intelligent beings.
Interesting point regarding returning them to their original forms: what if some didn't want to? You could then have a split society with the peace-loving and pastoral Vryne guarded by their kin, the poisonous dragonflies. Go to Comment
I really like this group. The Power Behind the Throne on a massive scale. This group is very capable of getting exactly what they want, since it is inevitable that everyone will hire them. Of course, one has to wonder... what exactly is the end goal of this group? Go to Comment
Where did it come from and what changes did occur?
Impartiality, Skill, Balance. Adreiem, divorka, borasis. Is this six things or three things. If it is six, what do the last three mean. If you are going to toss a "colang" into it, it is always best to put them first and in quotes, that way when the translation follows, we know what it is translating.
A fairly good post that would of been better without some consistancy issues. Go to Comment
Ok, I like this a lot. It fits well if you would link back your other submission to this one.
I like the flavor of the guild.
What made them who they are? Why did they first form? What motivates them to help everyone, to hire their services out? I see that some battles you said are sometimes determined before the conflict begins to the benefit of the guild. What determines that? Do they have another motive that is not seen to the public?
Unfortunately to many questions popped up when reading this. It is still a wonderful submission however. Go to Comment
Honestly, I like the group and the write up, but it seems to me that this has been done more than once, to the point where it isn't all that unique anymore. I like how you've spent the time to actually make them into a decent group, but with such an abrupt ending, I can't give it a better score. Go to Comment
It is a good post. Normally I hate this kind of character, but this one is well done.
You should all begin to see the power of Strolen v2.0 soon. If he writes up the Guild of Arcane Combatants (Society/ Mystical/ General or specific) then this will be linked to it. Then any other character from that Guild will be linked to that one, and it will create a web of related characters and things.
Krome, if you are writing a novel, this is a great place to post up some of that development work that all writers do, but never sees the light of day/ time in the novel. You know about the castle, about that wise woman in the woods, and all these things. You can cut and paste what you have written, add a bit more to be useful to gamers, and there you have it... instant post. Plus you get the advantage of "getting to know" your character, place, item, society, or what ever, even better.
It is the 7/8ths of the iceberg that hold it all together, that which is unseen. Link any of your posts that are from the novel with the novel's name in the freetext... or the name of the series.. or some linking identifier. Go to Comment
I love him. He is a perfect person to have as an ally but then later end up having as an enemy. I can see comments made between of. "I'm terribly sorry, the times we have had speaking of the arcane were entertaining. But alas, I have been hired to kill you. No hard feelings?"
This would make for a very decent twist to any campaign setting. I love it.
Now I want to know more about the Guild of Arcane Combatants. More more... Go to Comment
Indeed, I agree with Mourngrymn, I want to know more about the Guild...
This character is rather good for an NPC, whether as an ally you get stuck with, someone you encounter, or as an opponent. He aspires to greatness, yet doesn't fall into the munchkin category. Very nicely done. Go to Comment