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hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-19 07:36 PM
fixed the pores thing - it was late, probably had my words all mixed.

it seems that "Caste" is, as you say, a wrong word. I want to confer a feeling of isolation of a subset of individuals from the species. How would you make that idea come to life?

And as for an anime feel, it wasn't what I was going for, but far be it from me to tell you how to visualize my words =] Go to Comment
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-07-01 02:20 AM


Changed the "Castes" thing to a series of stable, and somewhat predictable mutations.


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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Strolen's comment on 2011-06-16 02:55 PM


I might be wrong on this account and am happy to be corrected, but I almost see this as 3+ different submissions that would do well to be linked together but each would probably stand well on their own.



The first, obviously, being the description of the magic and ether. That sub ended for me around where the description of the Sorcerer and The Choosing started up. With a tiny bit of work to separate them, that could be its own post and simply linked to from this one on the ether. Psionics would be the third that can be alluded to as another force available.



The only other critical critique is the mixture of things like diodes and cathodes as descriptors. While it makes perfect sense, if this is a dissertation of a living person during that time talking about diodes and sorcerers burned at the stake take me out of the sub. I may not know the rest of the world though and it might be appropriate.



All said I like the tone and voice and it is a very thorough description that I found quite complete. Nothing crazy cool or anything but it does a great job describing a rather abstract concept. Ether would prob get a 3.5 or so from me just because it is a great, solid sub.



Hope that helps! Great read!


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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-09-12 08:26 AM


I am liking this submission, quasi sentient magic radiation. I am also starting to appreciate the magiteck of the Greatlands.


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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-09-12 11:43 PM
It was me. :) Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-21 11:04 AM
This is great, it is concise, consistent in tone, complete, well paced and interesting. Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2011-07-10 08:00 PM


I love the ideas in this one - it is an interesting means to explain magic (never have liked the magik/magick, etc respelling..) in an otherwise technological world. It also works in worlds where magic is already commonplace.


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klauston's comment on 2012-12-20 09:50 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-26 03:06 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-16 06:23 PM


Thanks for the response. I agree now that I should have broken this down into a couple subs.



On the electronics note: this isn't a hard fantasy setting; If I had to coin the genre I'm writing in, I suppose it would be called "Science Fantasy." Electronics and energetic flow is known to the learned people, Wizards in particular are familiar with the concepts. Ether flows alot like electricity, and can be inhibited and channeled by certain elements.



I should probablly have made it clear that the world isn't one of "high fantasy" - it's truly a world where science/technology and "magic" interact with each other quite frequently, and while it might sound wierd to hear words like "Magick" and "Diode" next to each other, it would make perfect sense to a Greatlander of the day (providing he is learned enough to distinguish)


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hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-18 03:31 PM


Changed the sub entirely. Instead of devoting a single sub to a great many things, I took the time and narrowed this one down to Ether and Ethereal Magick alone.


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hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-12 11:41 PM


Thank you, whoever gave this an HoH. I'm honored, and I appreciate it =]


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hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-13 12:04 AM
AHAH. So you're the culprit. Well thank you Cheka. Maybe I'll have a couple more to add to my HoH collection someday MWUAHAHAHAHA Go to Comment
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Order of the Moonbeard

       By: valadaar

Among the assortment of organized criminals who live in the great city, few command greater fear the Moonbeard Order.

They of course do not call themselves that, but have earned the moniker from their fashion of dying their large beards with lye to produce a distinctive crescent shape running from earlobe to earlobe. This is meant as a taunt for their enemies, for it clearly outlines their throats.

They also wear garb similar to the northern tribesman, carefully tooled leather and showing multiple, colourful glyphs.

They are feared due to the intense discipline that their group maintains, due to their origins as a warrior-sect.

They serve as paid thugs, enforcers and assassins within the city, with the client simply ordering a service from the organization, not hiring an individual. Apart from making the request and providing payment in full in advance, the order completes the assignment themselves.

Their order has many moles through the organizations of the city, and more than a couple of nobles. As such, no organized move has been made against them since their chief activity is directed against other members of the crime world. It is said that their services have been useful for those in power as well, further protecting them from persecution.

Their religion holds that their time in this world is vanishingly brief, and largely unimportant except as training for the Great Battle.

The order is very utilitarian with weapons choice - they simply use the tool needed for the occasion, though not without having trained extensively with it beforehand. Daggers, garrottes, swords, bows, battle axes, polearms, wagons, even siege engines have been used to carry out their contracts.

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