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Prophets and Sorcerers
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-19 11:49 AM


Well, I was thinking of calling them something different. I chose to stick with Sorcerer simply because it was something people already knew, and it wouldn't be confused with the distinctly different "Wizard." But "Sorcerer" is simply the terminology that the Secta Arbite denotes to them. I'm sure the fearful populace has a number of colorful names to cakk them.



And to be honest PoisonAlchemist, I'm not entirely certain what happens when they die. I would assume that since the Prophet draws it's life force from the soul of it's host, when that soul vacates it can no longer sustain itself. However it is also bound at a physical and spiritual level as well, so the trauma of a "Real" death might simply kill the prophet as well.


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Prophets and Sorcerers
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-19 10:30 PM
OH. Well to answer that question - the word "Profitis" in Greek simply means "foreteller." So to be with a "Prophet" is a foretelling of power, good fortune, and might, or whatever other bounties an incredibly powerful Ethereal companion might bring about. It's a stretch, but all Ethereal spirits have rather abstract, metaphorical, single-word names.

On another note, I'm adding this to my Codex on Etherer and Magick. Go to Comment
Prophets and Sorcerers
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-25 11:22 AM
Update: Combed through spelling and grammar. Hopefully now it's a bit easier to read. Go to Comment
Prophets and Sorcerers
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-27 03:11 PM
Thank you Dossta =] Go to Comment
Prophets and Sorcerers
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PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-08-18 04:29 PM


I really like this different take on the sorcerer. I feel it should be linked to some sort of codex though since there seems to be an entire world hiding behind it. Why would a prophet wish to exist in the material plane? Do their kind have long term plans there? What happens when the sorcerer dies?


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Prophets and Sorcerers
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Tundra's comment on 2011-09-13 06:35 AM
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The Kandolari
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-06-14 06:32 AM


A note - simple math states that Kandolari populations will dwindle - a female needs to have more than two viable offspring that reach maturity to maintain a population. If infant mortality, war and disease play a large role, this number rises steeply.


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The Kandolari
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EchoMirage's comment on 2011-06-19 01:28 PM


Browsing once more: hair grows out of follicles, not pores.



Also, I would not have mutant 'castes' - mutation through its very nature is random. So, the same mutants are unlikely, unless the variant is caused by dormant genes that are easily activated; or unless the mutant breeds true, giving rise to a branching-off sub-species.



With their elfin appearance and colorful hair, they also confer an anime feel - I don't know if that's intended.


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The Kandolari
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-11 01:24 PM


An interesting and well thought out sub, with some useful concepts. One can easily drop this into  a fantasy campaign with a little effort, or use the race in something more futuristic. Well done!

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The Kandolari
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sverigesson's comment on 2011-06-14 10:43 AM


This is quite excellent for a first submission. Besides Echo's remark on what should be a rapidly declining population (maybe change it to 4 offspring, 2 of which might be "norma"). Besides that, this needs little changing, methinks. Well done, and welcome to the Citadel!


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The Kandolari
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MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-27 10:50 AM
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The Kandolari
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-14 12:24 PM


Yeah, looking back I think three children might be far too little. I might up it to five throughout their life.


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The Kandolari
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-19 06:36 PM
fixed the pores thing - it was late, probably had my words all mixed.

it seems that "Caste" is, as you say, a wrong word. I want to confer a feeling of isolation of a subset of individuals from the species. How would you make that idea come to life?

And as for an anime feel, it wasn't what I was going for, but far be it from me to tell you how to visualize my words =] Go to Comment
The Kandolari
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hylandpad's comment on 2011-07-01 01:20 AM


Changed the "Castes" thing to a series of stable, and somewhat predictable mutations.


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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Strolen's comment on 2011-06-16 01:55 PM


I might be wrong on this account and am happy to be corrected, but I almost see this as 3+ different submissions that would do well to be linked together but each would probably stand well on their own.



The first, obviously, being the description of the magic and ether. That sub ended for me around where the description of the Sorcerer and The Choosing started up. With a tiny bit of work to separate them, that could be its own post and simply linked to from this one on the ether. Psionics would be the third that can be alluded to as another force available.



The only other critical critique is the mixture of things like diodes and cathodes as descriptors. While it makes perfect sense, if this is a dissertation of a living person during that time talking about diodes and sorcerers burned at the stake take me out of the sub. I may not know the rest of the world though and it might be appropriate.



All said I like the tone and voice and it is a very thorough description that I found quite complete. Nothing crazy cool or anything but it does a great job describing a rather abstract concept. Ether would prob get a 3.5 or so from me just because it is a great, solid sub.



Hope that helps! Great read!


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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Scrasamax's comment on 2011-09-12 07:26 AM


I am liking this submission, quasi sentient magic radiation. I am also starting to appreciate the magiteck of the Greatlands.


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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Cheka Man's comment on 2011-09-12 10:43 PM
It was me. :) Go to Comment
Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-21 10:04 AM
This is great, it is concise, consistent in tone, complete, well paced and interesting. Go to Comment
Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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valadaar's comment on 2011-07-10 07:00 PM


I love the ideas in this one - it is an interesting means to explain magic (never have liked the magik/magick, etc respelling..) in an otherwise technological world. It also works in worlds where magic is already commonplace.


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
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klauston's comment on 2012-12-20 08:50 PM
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