A number of typos and one big conceptual question: why would dwarven magesmiths restrict these constructs to library work? Given the time and trouble to make one, and how tough they apparently are in combat, wouldn't a dwarven ruler want as many of these as he could get as guards? If they're sentient enough to defend their libraries against interlopers, are they sentient enough to be used as invulnerable workers or scouts in dicey environments? As shock troops ("Go down that corridor and kill everything that moves for the next ten minutes")? Go to Comment
Oh, no, of course you’ve got Commonwealth spelling; I’d never consider that a typo.
Here goes, though: first paragraph, third sentence, capitalization in the middle of a line. Second paragraph, run-on sentence without commas. Fourth paragraph, second sentence, “it’s” where you should have “its.” Fourth paragraph, third sentence, missing comma after “forge.” Sixth paragraph, second sentence, missing comma after “sitting.” Seventh paragraph, third sentence, “though” should be set off with commas. Go to Comment
So it's my first submission... Be gentle, ok? :)
I had this idea when I started to write up a basic framework for my next campaign. Generally I'd just write something rough down and leave it till I threw a creature profile together, but I thought I may as well write it up properly and see what you thought of it. Go to Comment
Cheers SV, I'm glad you like it. I've got a few other ideas for these blighters but I want to get them sorted in my head before I commit them to the Web.
Thanks Chek. That's the general asumption I've made in creating them, at the very least they'd be able to recognise their owners. I intended them to act almost as mini librarians but I don't think I portrayed this idea too well. I've also got an idea for a quest hook of them not recognising their owners... So we'll see how this works out and I'll update the entry in time. Go to Comment
The way I was planning on downplaying the defensive aspect was by throwing together a librarian automaton... Something with inteligence. The Book Keepers would act as the cleaners, maintainers and general gofors. While the librarian would interface with those wanting access to the archives.
I'll start work on edits to this now and then throw together a Librarian as well. Is there a way to link this page to another within the site or should I just add a URL link to this later in an edit? Go to Comment
Typos? I just went over the sub then and couldn't see any... I might be a bit worded out after that paper I just handed in for uni, so feel free to point them out to me :) Keeping in mind I'm an Aussie, so I'll spell words differently to Yanks... Namely Catalogue, colour, honour and defence. There's probably others... But those are what come to mind first off.
The more people comment on this the more I realise how much more time I need to spend on future subs. I'm putting together a list of amendments to add to this entry just as soon as my exams are over and done with.
But a couple that I can jot down now...
Why would dwarven magesmiths restrict these constructs to library work?
One of the things most precious to Dwarven mages and scholars is knowledge, they would consider the defence of their libraries/archives to be of the highest priority. Many would even prefer have their finer guards overseeing their archives and vaults. Afterall, every dwarf loves warfare, why send a machine to do a job a Dwarf is more than happy to do?
Why not use them as shock troops or scouts?
In the game world I'm building there are machines built just for this purpose. The book keepers were designed to efficiently archive and maintain the libraries, their offensive nature is secondary to their primary function.
"The world has an immovable dark red sun in the centre of the sky that produces very little light. The heat is totally unbearable and the aroma of delicious cooking meat is in the air. To look around it appears as though you are surrounded by giant black mountains with no vegetation anywhere. The ground is soft and an oily liquid flows into your footprints. Travelling reveals nothing else."
Any character without some resistance to fire or heat is slowly being cooked. The ground if you haven't guessed it is the cooked meat.
I've wanted this world to be part of a dimensional hopping "chase". I thought maybe to populate this world with giant carnivorous beetles or perhaps this could be a "Nirvana" for deceased or living (but dimension travelling) fire dragons.
Perhaps I've just been grilling a little too much meat or perhaps there are some great ideas out there on how to spruce up the place. Any suggestions?
Encounter ( Other ) | November 17, 2009 |