Eerie cults run by weird sorcerers are always welcome in my book. :D
I like the idols. They're appropriately vague, effective for any setting. Ifrengal seems an interesting character. I'd love to read more about him. Why is he a master of sorcerery? Why does he have this desire to control people so? Background on him would be pretty sweet.
I'd like some more detail on the cult itself as well. What kind of pitches do the Shithiran use? How do they deal with existing religious groups? What exactly is Na'Shithiran? This kind of detail would really work well for this sub.
As a first sub, this one's got great potential. I won't vote just yet, but I'd be happy to once you can work out some more of this detail. Hope to see lots more like this, epsilon! :D Go to Comment
Thanks all If only my fingers worked as quickly as my mind :) Id answer all your questions. For now let me say I have already started to edit my local copy, I will refresh as time permits. It turned out allot better than I anticipated and I feel, with your encouragement, its worthy of some polish.
I had "stolen" certain characters from a current campaign I'm running and yes Ifrengal is one of my "pops up" on various occasions villain. Starting life as a background filler NPC a few campaigns ago he has matured into a classic returning villain. (my players shudder when I drop his name) :)
Alas I waffle.
I intend to answer your thoughts, after I have had some of my own.
and yes feel free to point the submission to a better local, Im still learning the citadel labyrinth.
As for grammar, my humble apologies, you should have seen it before I ran it through word:) I will do better. Go to Comment