This is an interesting plot hook. It can even be used in a game not using the specifics. (Who is that peasant who begged the adventurers to help him on this quest? A heck of a lot more than he seems.) And if the players don't join up with him, they might find that staff first, and he'll want to take it away.
And, of course, even if his father recovers, the prince might just disappear so he can marry his girlfriend. Naturally, his bodyguards/advisors/father will simply not understand. ... Or maybe someone he trusts does, and encourages him to elope. And then while he's gone, the close friend seizes power. Or something. Anyway. Me likes. Go to Comment
Thank you miss Hawk, the peasant is named Joseph. A corrupted soul aidding the orcish king to get the staff first. In his mind the death of the king means thhat the land will be weakened. When the black king Vlame(Orcish king) attacks the country of Conqaz, Joseph wil be granted kingship and the love of Ranfral as his prize. Go to Comment
This is just equal parts sickly Lord of the Rings and cartoonish Warcraft. There's little detail, and we know almost nothing about their actual culture, just about a couple names and some armed forces. Unworthy.
On the other hand I do like posts like this for what they can be dissected for.
1. The trees were enchanted to produce white light day and night by Lord Valanair - Who was this Lord, is he still around, why did he magic the trees to glow? We already have a potential NPC, and an odd lifeform - the glowing trees.
2. The Flute of Vaxtar - what is it, what can it do, etc etc etc
3. Ellivanor, Meltifiace and Quelfinare - Three cities, three locations. Why is Ellivanor the largest? Are there any rivalries? What are the cities known for, if anything.
4. There is an army of seasoned elvish warriors supported by 240 rangers - Seasoned armies have seen combat and survived if not prevailed. Who have they fought, who are their enemies, what were their losses?
Unofortunelty I must give this submission a 1.5/5, other than spawning some interesting questions, it is still generic, vague, and alltogether too short. Go to Comment
The falueth song is the song Vaxtar plays when others are weak. The melody strenghens the heart of the good and weakens that of evil. Vaxtars trails are, find out the name of Hathil' father and succesfully raid the dwarvish realm of Faz-Gnomedrax. Go to Comment
I really like the idea here, but the post seems like it was written up in a hurry. If you come back and put a little more love into it, I'm sure you could make the goodness shine out even more. Go to Comment