"He then swapped the daggers with those that his enemies had. A few days later they all winded up dead each with a dagger stuck through his heart."
Apart from the spelling (wound up as opposed to winded up), how did he manage to swap the daggers? Magic? Paid assassins?
"Since then the daggers have disappeared and have not been found since, all apart from three, two of which have been destroyed and the other which resides with the new high mage who is trying to break the spell on them and trace their creator."
How did the daggers dissappear, if they were found in the hearts of their victems? Stolen? Dissolved in the victem's blood?
Each of these daggers is cursed and drains their bearers of will and eventually drives them insane and forces them to kill themselves with the dagger. "
Not too eventually if a couple days after they get them they stab themselves. Go to Comment
Heh, I didn't mean to use those ideas verbatium - not all of mine are good either!
Now, I think we can boil down the thesis of your idea to:
1. Mage wants revenge against his enemies.
2. He creates magical weapons that force the bearer to kill themselves.
Now, how plausable that all 12 of his enemies are going to go out and buy magic daggers from the same person, especially on a short notice? You need to come up with something a LOT more plausable. The Death Wraith part seems a little over the top.
So, why would 12 mages suddenly acquire a cursed item? Perhaps some ritual group they are part of includes it as a badge of entry?
These seem rather powerful - what price did the mage pay to make these/get these made, especially in little time? Hopefully something more original then 'he sold his soul...'.
You really need to work on your english as well as spelling and as others have said, read other subs, especially the golden ones for what quality they are looking for. I've got a ways to go too. Go to Comment
A vengeful mage gives his enemies some cursed daggers. They drive you paranoid and suicidal, and when you slash someone with it, I guess the person fades out over time. If you stab them in the brain with it, do they fade out instantly?
Still a few holes. Why does he want to summon a death god? What plot was he uncovering with the captain of the guard? Go to Comment
Since Van was exiled, the mood of the court has degenerated even further. The king and his cronies, once reasonable people, have descended into a mire of intrigue and mistrust. The courtiers are paranoid already, and looking for ways to eliminate each other. When they all get daggers, the paranoia from the dagger is multiplied ten-fold, even to the point of influencing those around them.
Within a few days, the palace is a madhouse. The king has ordered the guards away (not trusting them), all the doors have been locked, and half of the court has been murdered. Many members of the court have fled, thinking that some curse has come upon them, while the king and his courtiers hide and hunt each other in the darkened halls of the Elven palace. Anyone they come across is obviously an assassin, sent to kill them. Of course, the party is sent in to straighten things out, and promptly start kicking some noble elvish butt.
Oh, sweet, a magic dagger! These guys have some nice loot! Go to Comment
Also, a crazy elf king and all his powerful, verdant abjurations would make an awesome opponent.
Maybe Van Torxes will even show up to gloat over the Fall of the House of Karonie Karile. He probably won't be pleased that the PCs are here, mucking up his years of carefully laid plans. Go to Comment
There are no scrolls in this world, but there are crystals of various sizes, colors and qualities. Every spell has a requirement on the amount and characteristics of crystals that must be held in order for the spell to be cast, crystals which would shatter should the cast be successful. Now picture a land where crystals are scarce except for high concentrations of them in specific spots throughout the land. A number of scenarios could occur, such as benign companies selling the mined valuable for cheap, a region in constant magic-intense war zone, an area of crystals in the quicksand, or an undiscovered patch next to a town...
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