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Daggers of Torxes
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chilled's comment on 2006-11-26 08:31 AM
i'll work on it.
thanks for the advice.
can i use a few of the ideas you have put here? Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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chilled's comment on 2008-04-02 04:14 AM
yeah im gonna scap this and start it afresh.
it may take a while, and ill only do it in smalll chunks. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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chilled's comment on 2012-06-08 02:47 AM
I don't understand why this has been challenged. I wish people would have the decency to say that they are challenging it and why.

I admit, it could do with a few updates. I will see what can be done. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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valadaar's comment on 2006-10-13 12:52 PM
"He then swapped the daggers with those that his enemies had. A few days later they all winded up dead each with a dagger stuck through his heart."

Apart from the spelling (wound up as opposed to winded up), how did he manage to swap the daggers? Magic? Paid assassins?

"Since then the daggers have disappeared and have not been found since, all apart from three, two of which have been destroyed and the other which resides with the new high mage who is trying to break the spell on them and trace their creator."

How did the daggers dissappear, if they were found in the hearts of their victems? Stolen? Dissolved in the victem's blood?

"Magic/Cursed Properties
Each of these daggers is cursed and drains their bearers of will and eventually drives them insane and forces them to kill themselves with the dagger. "

Not too eventually if a couple days after they get them they stab themselves. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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valadaar's comment on 2006-10-15 11:25 AM
Heh, I didn't mean to use those ideas verbatium - not all of mine are good either!

Now, I think we can boil down the thesis of your idea to:

1. Mage wants revenge against his enemies.
2. He creates magical weapons that force the bearer to kill themselves.


Now, how plausable that all 12 of his enemies are going to go out and buy magic daggers from the same person, especially on a short notice? You need to come up with something a LOT more plausable. The Death Wraith part seems a little over the top.

So, why would 12 mages suddenly acquire a cursed item? Perhaps some ritual group they are part of includes it as a badge of entry?

These seem rather powerful - what price did the mage pay to make these/get these made, especially in little time? Hopefully something more original then 'he sold his soul...'.

You really need to work on your english as well as spelling and as others have said, read other subs, especially the golden ones for what quality they are looking for. I've got a ways to go too. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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valadaar's comment on 2006-11-03 12:19 PM
if you read the sub properly you might have noticed that...

Not a good way to get positive feedback. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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Ted's comment on 2012-06-08 01:02 AM
While it might need polish, shine and work, I don't see anything about this sub that would warrant it being removed through the challenge system. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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Ted's comment on 2012-06-10 01:44 AM
Checking again, it looks like the challenge has been resolved. Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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Kassy's comment on 2012-07-27 06:38 AM
This came up in my 'UNVOTED by' section, and after taking a read through it I fail to see why this has received a low score. Yes, more work could be done to improve it, but it isn't that bad, is it?

In any case, I hope to see some more work done on this. As it stands I will give it a 3.0/5 Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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Forganthus's comment on 2012-06-07 06:57 PM
A vengeful mage gives his enemies some cursed daggers. They drive you paranoid and suicidal, and when you slash someone with it, I guess the person fades out over time. If you stab them in the brain with it, do they fade out instantly?

Still a few holes. Why does he want to summon a death god? What plot was he uncovering with the captain of the guard?
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Daggers of Torxes
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Forganthus's comment on 2012-06-07 06:59 PM
Since Van was exiled, the mood of the court has degenerated even further. The king and his cronies, once reasonable people, have descended into a mire of intrigue and mistrust. The courtiers are paranoid already, and looking for ways to eliminate each other. When they all get daggers, the paranoia from the dagger is multiplied ten-fold, even to the point of influencing those around them.

Within a few days, the palace is a madhouse. The king has ordered the guards away (not trusting them), all the doors have been locked, and half of the court has been murdered. Many members of the court have fled, thinking that some curse has come upon them, while the king and his courtiers hide and hunt each other in the darkened halls of the Elven palace. Anyone they come across is obviously an assassin, sent to kill them. Of course, the party is sent in to straighten things out, and promptly start kicking some noble elvish butt.

Oh, sweet, a magic dagger! These guys have some nice loot! Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
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Forganthus's comment on 2012-06-07 07:04 PM
Also, a crazy elf king and all his powerful, verdant abjurations would make an awesome opponent.

Maybe Van Torxes will even show up to gloat over the Fall of the House of Karonie Karile. He probably won't be pleased that the PCs are here, mucking up his years of carefully laid plans. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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Cheka Man's comment on 2012-06-07 09:33 PM
None of your links work though. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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Murometz's comment on 2013-12-12 02:38 PM
I do kind of like the *almost* explored format here...bizarre beasties and how PCs can defeat/deal with them. Otherwise, what everyone else said. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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chilled's comment on 2012-06-08 02:43 AM
They are still in work, I will upload them soon.

My apologies for any confusion. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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chilled's comment on 2012-06-08 05:24 AM
Hmm, you're right. None of them do!? The links to Scrasamax' profile and his submission should though. Hmmph! Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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chilled's comment on 2012-06-10 06:37 AM
Drakesh Sir?

Well I ain't ever seen one meself. Arr, but legend has it they're dragons, just you know, bigger..

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It's supposed to be generic, I don't want to go in to too much detail here. I hope to give myself and others ideas with this. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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chilled's comment on 2012-06-10 06:39 AM
The submission also contains grue-infested links where soon submissions will rise. Go to Comment
Legendary Terror
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valadaar's comment on 2013-05-06 11:00 AM
I would suggest at the least creating stubs to contain the linked creatures, with your general thoughts on the subject, rather than subjecting us to Grue's :)
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Legendary Terror
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Kassy's comment on 2012-06-09 05:58 PM
What Moonlake said.

Good sub, well written and presented.

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