Holy crap. I really like the thought that went into this sub, and how your kaiju is actually a swarm of smaller beings. This feels somewhat similar to a zombie horde in that it is mindless and nigh-unstoppable.
I can see this working once. Maybe twice. But wouldn't humanity have developed some defenses by the next time the swarm comes around? Giant electrical fences or something? I would love to read more about a world in which the human population was forced to adapt to a seasonal threat like this.
The only thing I would change would be the nests -- they should always be defended in some way, even if just with difficult terrain. Sending a party of PCs to rescue a kidnapped human population would be an awesome adventure, so why make it too easy? Go to Comment
Thx, Dossta. Though the nest is secluded, and hard to reach by foot. I may have forgot to mention that bit. I'll throw that bit in, just to make things clear. And (reading your comment jarred this idea out of my skull) add runt shadowbeasts- five foot long beasts that guard the nest. As to humanity's defenses, they would try to make something. I'll think on that. Go to Comment
When you talk about your standard, generic D&D magic, I don't disagree at all and you point is fairly well made. You could also say another word too: dragon.
However, if you had a game or story that required a siege then there are also tons of ways to allow the incorporation of magic (or magical creatures) without overbalancing. They are way too numerous to mention and it doesn't really detract from your point.
true. Magic would not completely eleminate it. It would just severely change it. With magic in play, the whole developement of technology and humankind would change. Still, the need for sleep would not affect it much either way- there is probably going to be more than one wizard on either side. The extra wizards could take over at night, and so on. Go to Comment
By breaking it down you've made it easier to read.
While the backstory is passable (I am no good at writing decent histories/backstories myself I might add), it starts with a glaring cliche, this isn't necessarily a bad thing, it just has that; "heard it before feel".
The part about the sculptor and its creation is fine.
The last part still raises some questions for me: How did Ytinutroppo know about its creation?, what is this loophole that he forgot to cover?
Also, this line doesn't make any sense to me: "(he's so powerful he doesn't need to show off with a ...the bloody)."
As it stands it is ok, but could still do with some more work being done. Take your time when creating something, there is no rush.