Thx, Dossta. Though the nest is secluded, and hard to reach by foot. I may have forgot to mention that bit. I'll throw that bit in, just to make things clear. And (reading your comment jarred this idea out of my skull) add runt shadowbeasts- five foot long beasts that guard the nest. As to humanity's defenses, they would try to make something. I'll think on that. Go to Comment
When you talk about your standard, generic D&D magic, I don't disagree at all and you point is fairly well made. You could also say another word too: dragon.
However, if you had a game or story that required a siege then there are also tons of ways to allow the incorporation of magic (or magical creatures) without overbalancing. They are way too numerous to mention and it doesn't really detract from your point.
true. Magic would not completely eleminate it. It would just severely change it. With magic in play, the whole developement of technology and humankind would change. Still, the need for sleep would not affect it much either way- there is probably going to be more than one wizard on either side. The extra wizards could take over at night, and so on. Go to Comment
By breaking it down you've made it easier to read.
While the backstory is passable (I am no good at writing decent histories/backstories myself I might add), it starts with a glaring cliche, this isn't necessarily a bad thing, it just has that; "heard it before feel".
The part about the sculptor and its creation is fine.
The last part still raises some questions for me: How did Ytinutroppo know about its creation?, what is this loophole that he forgot to cover?
Also, this line doesn't make any sense to me: "(he's so powerful he doesn't need to show off with a ...the bloody)."
As it stands it is ok, but could still do with some more work being done. Take your time when creating something, there is no rush.
A decent trap room. The backstory is interesting but seems to add little to it's purpose today and any possible future for the room, unless someone wants to summon another demon. If I were to use this room it would be the final treasure room of main baddies. I would probably replace the zombies with something ethereal, as to me that matches the flavor of the room better. Go to Comment