Strolen\s Citadel content. 
The Year of the Exile
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Game Mastering)
valadaar's comment on 2014-01-13 08:43 PM
"The elves took the forests, the dwarves took the mines, the goblins and humans took the farmlands, and the orcs took what was left"

There is a lot of history here, but the tropes are so strong they are uninspired. That the elves caused a downfall by not allowing forests to be cut is very one-dimensional and simplistic. Even among humans there are many nuances with how groups relate with each other.

It seems to be a rewrite of WWII in some aspects, with Aetius holding the title name.

It works - obviously the real world history that it draws from happened, but it seems forced to fit that mold, What is not explained, for example, is really why the neighboring races did not act sooner. In the real world, the powers were still smarting from the devastating war before, and with democracies could not easily go to war.

There are a fair number of places where the text seems to contradict itself:

"By the time the buildup to the Year of the Exile came about, Kathia had grown fat on military conquest. During the beginning of the buildup, it reached a point of peace, called the Prosperitas Kathiae (translated: The Prosperity of Kathia). "

I really can't follow when they were peaceful, and when they were not. How did they grow fat on conquest at peace? How could they push into their neighbors? What kept them from squashing them when the began to get hostile. Racisim works both ways.

I guess my main complaint is that the submission really does not answer the question of how they managed to defeat all four races.







Go to Comment
The Fae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Cheka Man's comment on 2013-12-06 08:58 AM
Very like the Elves of the Discworld. Go to Comment
The Fae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-12-09 02:28 PM
This is quite a dark take on the Fae, which is good to counter the typical view of these folks.

Certain 'activities' seem a bit difficult, considering their size, but I assume they use magic to address that shortcoming?

Go to Comment
The Fae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Kal_23's comment on 2013-12-20 06:56 AM
Really enjoyed this piece. Would add a very "interesting" element to a game. I agree with Valadaar above, wondering how (as he puts it) these "activities" happen. But I suppose that's for your your players to imagine and not for the GM to describe. Go to Comment
A Dwindling Fortune
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Murometz's comment on 2013-11-25 09:24 PM
Oh oh, private drafts showing up on 'recent citadel activity'. Is that supposed to happen? Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-22 01:56 PM
Its a good description of the locale, and usable. The Tattoo link is a bit of a stretch - its a minor detail that does not sit at the core of the sub - its maritime nature is more so.

Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-20 04:27 AM


Now that I've read the sub, it does seem the tattoo part is sort of secondary to Reposia as a location. I agree tattooing is somewhat a central part of their culture but now like you, I'm a bit uncertain whether this belongs to the quest or not. So I guess we'll wait for the next person/persons to decide.



Quite solid sub but need to ponder a bit before voting.

Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
caesar193's comment on 2013-11-18 07:08 PM
Update: I'm not sure if this belongs in the Tattoo Quest. I put it in mainly because the tattooing bit inspired the rest of the Reposian culture. If you feel that it doesn't belong among the quest subs, than I'll be more than happy to remove it. Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
caesar193's comment on 2013-11-22 08:25 PM
Update: As per suggestions, removed from quest Go to Comment
Reposia
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
caesar193's comment on 2013-11-22 08:28 PM
Or did I? Doesn't seem to want to leave the quest submissions Go to Comment
Tauria
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-03 11:13 AM
Good solid location rife with interesting tid-bits to branch off from... Go to Comment
Tauria
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-14 01:57 PM
An odd hybrid Monarchy/Republic, sort of like the Magna Carta going in and out of effect from time to time. A good nation with lots of details.


Go to Comment
Tauria
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
Gossamer's comment on 2013-11-30 04:01 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Tauria
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
CrazyF1r3f0x's comment on 2013-11-13 02:05 PM
An entire kingdom wrapped up in a well organized document! Seems like many encounters could be created from this. I'd give you a 5 but I am out of votes for the day :( Go to Comment
Tauria
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
CrazyF1r3f0x's comment on 2013-11-13 08:04 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-11-02 04:32 PM
I'm impressed you worked it into Atheus! I would have just made a stand alone sub (that's what i did with my optional quest :p)

a useful item with a dangerous curse for balance. I like that the user sometimes sees the angel weeping from the corner of his eyes when his future is erased. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2013-11-07 08:13 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-08 05:01 PM
I would guess that he does. The attached picture has text links to the BBC and Dr. Who. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-08 05:10 PM
Very strong clear prose as far as I am concerned. I the drawback section though you seem to strike a very different tone and approach it with a very different perspective (second person) than the rest of the piece. It is a little jarring, and it sort of ruins the in game immersion of the piece in favor of game mechanics. Perhaps it call all be in a blockquote.

Good stuff, I like the plot idea of trying to fight a villain with this. Go to Comment
The Weeping Angel
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-11-09 12:32 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Total Comments:
498

Join Now!!




Fatal error: Call to undefined function top_menu() in /home/strolen/public_html/lockmor/application/views/citadel/vfooter.php on line 2