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axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-02 10:49 PM
Saulke is just really picky... . Go to Comment
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valadaar's comment on 2017-02-24 12:07 PM
This is really nifty - there is a lot of places where this could go. Good stuff! Go to Comment
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Aramax's comment on 2017-02-26 06:21 AM
5/5 JUST WOW!!!!!! Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-04 09:51 PM
Axle, I had promised to vote on this in exchange for your comment on my Fengshui (although I don't know whether you took notice or not). Anyway, finally I've finished reading this but I'm currently a bit torn over what score to give it- in particular, I'm choosing b/w 4.5 and a full score.

Onto the actual comments: I don't have any objections to the content and I love the 3 perspectives on history and esp. the opening blockquote. The idea of Warkra being a society incapable of hatred to me could possibly arise due to their living environment being resource-rich relative to their own population (prob. not the case here) or other things such as cultural belief that make them absolutely content with their current ways of life (I know, some ppl would start saying this is contrary to human nature which always chases after what it doesn't have but then in documentaries, sometimes you also see ppl living in less developed places and living a sort of hunt/forage life that are perfectly happy with their ways of living. And that's my personal take on these Warkra).

I do, however, have a slight issue with the formatting. As it currently stands, I find it ultra hard to read in one seating (and I actually read this piece bit by bit), esp. the History by Rachel 3rd. This is a length issue obviously but also, I think it will help improve the readability of the Rachel 3rd section if it was broken up a bit with blockquotes like the People's History of the Warkra Sea section. In addition, while I like the mythical feel of the tale of Saulke and Rachel's encounter with him, somewhat lacking is a more personal voice that will strengthen the atmosphere of this legendary encounter. Go to Comment
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-05 12:03 AM
Sorry, Axle, couldn't vote full marks on this even though I was really tempted. My 5 are reserved for those that I deem perfection (i.e. wouldn't change a thing) or sweep me off my feet/keep my eyes glued at first sight. Nevertheless, this is still a high quality sub and adds great depth to the world of Decathros. In fact, now I will be eagerly following Decathros subs. Go to Comment
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caesar193's comment on 2013-05-24 07:56 PM
The multiple separate histories, written by the different people, was a great method. I especially like how the difference in perspective changed from the warkra just being a pest to explaining their side.

On the subject of Warkra, I personally think that they are too innocent. You have made them a society that does not hate, or have enemies. I think that any human culture is going to have some degree of competition. And competition spawns rivalries, which spawn enemies. And, if they were living on the four small islands, they'd probably not meet the people on the northern one. But this is a detail, and I won't mark you down for it.

Other than that, it had all the classic elements of excellence: depressed gods, a hard won miracle, and islands who just hate gray hairs. Good job, Axelrowes. Go to Comment
Agar's comment on 2012-10-30 04:38 AM
A great piece of literature. Makes me want to think of the other things tank parts could be used for besides to solar sheet, and other engines for tanks, including ones run on willpower. The story definitely conveys the authors regard for his tank, and in that, the reason for their existence and proliferation. Very good work. Go to Comment
MoonHunter's comment on 2013-03-31 02:16 PM
Nicely done. Well Written. Good Visuals. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-30 10:10 AM
I can see the SBT in mymind, you've painted not just a machine (while some readers could argue that almost nothing is told about the tank itself) but the combination of history, the blending of men, machine, and a moment in history. I like the Dynastic references to Earth, hiccups in interstellar travel, and the way the SBT just feels. I am brought to think of the brutal pragmaticism of the Warhammer 40k land raiders and Leeman Russ tanks and their mass produced pre-fabricated modular layout (Book says you can built them from advanced armor composites, plain iron, or even out of pressboard and wood) as well as the ubiquitous overlooked and otherwise ignored valiant fighting tanks from Battletech like the humble Scorpion light tank or the Vedette.

Well done sir. I like the tone and the pace you set. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-30 11:38 PM
For the first time since it rolled off of a factory line, some love for the sad and lonely Scorpion!
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Murometz's comment on 2012-11-09 11:35 AM
Not my cup of tea content-wise, but still found myself lost and caught up in the tale! Expertly written and presented. And what they both said! Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-30 05:47 PM
I was thinking of the Scorpion when I wrote this. Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 03:26 PM
that is really all I hope for :) Go to Comment
Kassy's comment on 2013-06-10 08:31 AM
3.5/5

Pretty much what le Muro said.

I enjoyed reading it. Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-08 10:11 AM
As long as this is, I want more. The perspective of the goddess was sometimes distracting, but at other times, sublime. I found both characters of Gorn and Kiijan interesting, and while the pace was slow, I think that is what made it dwarven. Well done. Go to Comment
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Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-28 02:37 PM
Have an HoH sir Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2012-10-09 05:15 PM
Ok, read it finally. Now have to go pass out from exhaustion :-) But not before saying, this is outstanding and I really enjoyed reading it. Some solid dwarvisms and an original voice! Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2012-10-09 09:07 PM
I may just end up picking out my favorite bits from this piece, randomly over the years, and say, "i like it".

Here is the first:

 "...they are insane because no dwarf on the water can think properly." Go to Comment
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Murometz's comment on 2013-11-21 06:13 PM
Holy sweet Jesus! Go to Comment
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axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-09 10:21 PM
This has both dwarven sea captains and pet rocks...just for you
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