Also this is really painful to reread, having a 30 minute time limit just means I ramble it seems.Go to Comment
I am sorry never really read this comment before, I fixed the thing about I have no daughter...that did not make sense you're right.
As for the guy with the book of truths and the truths, I was inspired to write this because when I was in college it came out the college was under reporting campus crime or down grading campus crime to make the campus seem safer and more pleasant. So when I sat down with a timer set to 30 minutes and the "quest" as my inspiration I tried to think of cults I had known in life.
The big ten wanted to seem wholesome. That is what the chief bird guy is doing here, I tried to paint the writing as something as he enjoyed for the writing's sake. His justifications for covering the storm and not writing about the murder are flawed, and intended them to be perceived this way. I was trying to communicate that he was not writing about crime or violence because he did not like it, and he enjoyed writing about stuff like storms.
I tried to confirm this later when the anthropologist's husband is going through the old records and notes that society changes. But that change is likely due to record keeping, not a change in behavior, or at least all the records are dubious after the events of the story. Then when Postlincoln tries to tell her husband about the murder and the report or lack there of, she finds it difficult to speak about it. She is tried and uncomfortable and in that moment she herself decides that she would rather ignore the murder, even if just for a little while, so she can go to sleep.
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If any of this failed to come through it is my fault as a writer, and I really need this type feedback to improve. So thank you, sincerely.