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My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
valadaar's comment on 2016-11-01 10:08 AM
Brutal. Well written and well crafted. Good Stuff!
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My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-01 06:41 PM
Very nice the narrative tone sets the scene nicely, and the over all presentation felt fresh and well laid out, definitely one of my new favorites! Go to Comment
My Taalkastin Boatman
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
Kassy's comment on 2014-04-02 12:03 PM
5.0/5 from moi aussi

As Sil mentioned, the presentation in this is neat. It makes for very pleasant reading. Well done :) Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-04-03 12:33 AM
An interesting character, and while he could be described as one dimensional, there are certainly people in real life who are one dimensional. I like the fact that Igor is a man of god out of fear, rather than any sort of real religious calling, and that many of his motivations, aside from divine fear, are based in real world materialism. Igor feels like a real person, with interests in caring for his family and his legacy, as well as having a level head about things like war.

This is a good character, and I could see using him not just in his given setting, but as a man of importance dealing with adventurers-upon-return, and doing the duties of the non-present King, such as making deal with mercenaries, settling disputes, endorsing or condemning actions such as hunting down people without any sort of oversight, or pardoning certain other people. Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-21 02:57 AM
The appearance paragraph already has me 'hooked' to this character b/c I'm forever into past demons etc. This is my favourite Parnian noble so far (haven't yet read all of them though). Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-27 07:49 PM
Like the companion sub on his wife, I like the contrast between him being a good diplomatic and leader and his weakness in calvary and esp. his struggle with his cultural heritage. I like Ysra slightly more because she seems more interesting whereas Halldor still seems essentially a knight at heart but then I know not much could be done about that given that he's lawful good in alignment.

Typo alert- I thought the last line of the Appearance paragraph contained the typo "since" which should be "sense" or something similar. Go to Comment
valadaar's comment on 2016-11-09 09:14 AM
A good NPC writeup. And a good example of stats being present without taking away from the sub.

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Moonlake's comment on 2014-12-27 07:55 PM
I could see Karim as a character just awaiting misfortune to befall him. Still, I quite like the way he's presented here. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2014-05-06 12:35 AM
It's beautiful, the integration is everything I would want, the strange, the mercenary, the malign, the corporate...

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Dragonlordmax's comment on 2014-03-28 11:31 PM
I confess I have a hard time commenting on this one - this kind of sci-fi is not so much my thing. There's something to be said for a psychic martial artist war mech, though, I suppose. And it could make a good looming destruction sort of enemy, I think. You recommend not fighting it, but it seems a little odd to create such a menace and then not involve it in combat.

The locusts are pretty horrifying - enough so that I almost feel that they would be better off as their own submission, with perhaps a link between the two. Go to Comment
Murometz's comment on 2014-12-17 03:55 PM
Really cool character here! A ballet dancer...and then bam! The locusts are creepy good too! Enjoyed reading this. Go to Comment
Aramax's comment on 2014-12-16 08:47 AM
Very few Ideas here,I would use without modification. Id always change some little parts here or there.(Not counting the setting ,of course). This over looked master piece is PERFECT in that I would use it WITHOUT modifacation! Not to mention thr Griffon is one of the shapest looking Mechs. I have a quibble or two but I'm going to keep them to myself,in that I don't want you to change a single word. Go to Comment
Aramax's comment on 2015-02-13 01:09 PM
HoHed again cause this needs luv Go to Comment
Aramax's comment on 2016-04-02 09:21 AM
Still needs more Luv!!!!!!!!!! Go to Comment
The Nightmare Demons of Sorrow
Plots  (Mystical)   (Mini-Campaign)
Dragonlordmax's comment on 2014-03-14 05:43 PM
The idea of demons which torment people in their sleep is a somewhat familiar one, but these guys have a more philosophical bent to them which is interesting. The demons themselves are certainly interesting.

I do think I would be inclined to extend the exorcism a bit more than in your example. That is, rather than calling out the demon so explicitly, I might prefer to make that bit into more of a mystery/clue hunt kind of thing. Go to Comment
The Nightmare Demons of Sorrow
Plots  (Mystical)   (Mini-Campaign)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-07-12 01:47 AM
This sub could use a once-over since there are typos that impede understanding (only slightly but still) at places. Sounds like a good set of adventures that could incorporate both a combat solution and a more puzzle type solution. And I just happen to let the theme of this sub quite a bit. Go to Comment
Parna's Cradle and the Golden Stamp
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-27 09:49 AM
Good catch thanks: fIxed that sentence and broke up some of the paragraphs. Go to Comment
Parna's Cradle and the Golden Stamp
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2014-03-27 09:16 AM
A cool location though I think it could benefit from a little more going over.

Some of the paragraphs suffer from being a bit too large, and the same could be said for a few sentences.

Others are a bit odd - I can't quite follow this one:

"Pasha is atypical physical specimen an Ator."

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Parna's Cradle and the Golden Stamp
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Plains)
Stork's comment on 2014-03-08 11:05 AM
This would be an interesting place to visit. I can imagine the party arriving just as the 'Court' is about to leave after a few days of shenanigans. The party could dig up all the dirt on the nobles and use it to there advantage.

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Murometz's comment on 2014-03-05 10:56 PM
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