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The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-01-12 08:50 PM
Only if you get them excited first. I hear some dwarves actually pay for that. Go to Comment
The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
valadaar's comment on 2014-12-17 03:44 PM
Agree with Tusserk on this one. Completely. :)
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The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Aramax's comment on 2015-01-12 08:46 PM
So all we have to do is punch them in the beard and they can't breathe?Seriously 4/5


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The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Stork's comment on 2014-12-16 06:31 PM
Now there is a new way of injuring a Dwarf. Cut his beard and watch him bleed!

I like it. Go to Comment
The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Tusserk's comment on 2014-12-16 12:59 AM
Sooo... Dwarven faces are like baboon butts? :D

This has got to be one of the most unique ideas I have seen, and after gaming for the last 28 years I have seen quite a bit Go to Comment
Murometz's comment on 2014-11-17 12:13 PM
1/3rd of the way done...taking a break. Go to Comment
Moonlake's comment on 2015-03-13 01:54 AM
Firstly, I have to admit that I read this a bit ad-hoc with breaks in between and I don't know whether this skewed my score. I like how this story ends and yet it seems a little abrupt for me. What I meant by this was that I got too carried away for the Viking/pirate feel of Akribus throughout the story and I wasn't quite prepared when he turned freedom fighter at the end for the sake of his son and all those lore of the Sun and Moon (I like lore usually but here there's something about all those lore that feels a little off to me for unknown reason although rationally I don't have argument with them since they are part of the lore for the sword) Go to Comment
The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
valadaar's comment on 2016-02-26 11:20 AM
This is neat. I had to read it all the way to grasp everything though. The exact mechanic she used to kill should have been presented when Kaiser bought it, rather then it being a 'reveal' further below.

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The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-17 03:56 AM
Is this written up for a particular world setting? (if so which, I want to check into it!) If not I can see this working out well in Shadow Run with a bit of tweaking, or fantasy settings with even more changes.

Nicely done, and gives a great usage example of the Flirting Dress. Go to Comment
The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Kassy's comment on 2014-05-06 12:05 PM
4.5/5

A very good plot. One I'd like to try out with a group at some point. Go to Comment
The Gorgon Rune and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
eleclipse's comment on 2014-04-17 10:37 AM
Intriguing use of the dress, i really like it. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-18 04:30 PM
I have been told many times that the citadel is an Rpg site, not a fiction site. And that RPG fiction should end right before or right after something really awful or dramatic happens, that way the players can pick up where the author left off, so we continue this in a forum RPG, or write me another weird item and I will try an incorporate into another thread of this narrative. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-01 03:43 PM
I think fiction is fine here - we have a section for it, so don't let that hold you back.

A novel use of the dress, and a good one.
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Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-04-16 07:32 PM
A fun short that feels like it's part of something bigger, I would enjoy seeing it continued someday.

Brilliant use of the dress, although I do wonder if the ink would run and perhaps bleed through the dress, making the message visible to all as the night wore on. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Stork's comment on 2014-04-17 06:34 PM
A fine story. I also would like to read more. Go to Comment
Elizabeth Sheybad and the Flirting Dress
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
eleclipse's comment on 2014-04-17 10:46 AM
Nice, i could totally see this in a "girl genius" setting. I second the desidere to see more of this. Go to Comment
Rulund Drussel (1st Vassal)
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2014-05-07 03:46 PM
A good, very detailed NPC, with lots of traits and bits and pieces.

Not in love with sentences continuing into blockquotes - I find the transition a little jarring.

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Ysra Fulsven Vineblud (Noblewoman of Parna)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-11-29 12:24 PM
Thanks, I rewrote the awkward sentences. Mores might be considered an anachronistic term in this context.


Merriam-Webster:
mo┬Ěres:
the customs, values, and behaviors that are accepted by a particular group, culture, etc. Go to Comment
Ysra Fulsven Vineblud (Noblewoman of Parna)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
valadaar's comment on 2016-03-31 09:21 AM
A very well detailed and presented NPC. Go to Comment
Ysra Fulsven Vineblud (Noblewoman of Parna)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2014-11-28 07:08 PM
A fully fleshed out character and I like the Personal Failing, Secret and Motivation sections. However, might like to do an once-over to check spelling etc. For example, the end of the first paragraph under Appearance of Impressions:
"Among the Ator women in social situations are expected to guide the conversation even if they don't offer much input....According to the Ator mores Ysra speaks when she should be quiet and is quiet when she should be speaking. If one were to watch with her interact with husband or close family privately, only then would they see her reveal any joy or pleasure in life."
The first sentence reads a little awkward. I'm not aware that "mores" is a word (2nd sentence but then if this is archaic form, then maybe it's okay). The first 'with' in the last sentence is a typo. Go to Comment
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