Strolen\s Citadel content. 
The Saulberry
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Plains)
Murometz's comment on 2013-01-12 12:44 PM
This is well imagined and written. Go to Comment
The Saulberry
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-02 01:45 PM
Update: changed to normal sub due to Strolen's influence Go to Comment
The Saulberry
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Plains)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 10:08 PM
A nice mundane berry for a fantasy world, the blockquote was well done and for that, bonus 0.5 points. Go to Comment
The Saulberry
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Plains)
Dossta's comment on 2013-01-09 07:15 PM
I love the descriptors you used in the backstory, axle. "Seeing the noise of the miracle" was very cool phrasing. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-01-09 05:37 PM
a very rich environment you have created, axle - I love what you have done with it!

I can see plenty of uses for this place too. For example, a plot: The current Favorim has been murdered! The lands have turned to ice and there have been no replacement Favorims lined up as the death was unexpected! Indeed, there don't seem to be any women currently on the isle that fit the required description! The PC's must hunt down a willing replacement - whether it be on the island, or perhaps they must venture out into the rest of Decathros to find her! This, obviously is top priority, but as soon as they return with the replacement a new priority has emerged; who murdered the previous Favorim, and why!?

I love the multiple histories you have.
It impresses me what different views can come out of different peoples' minds: I had not had anything like this in mind when I drew it, but that's the idea. It will make this world rich and diverse, to see what everyone else comes up with.

Ah, also: If someone is gloomy and upset, in a bad temper, people often will say they are "Saulking" in homage to the depressed god. Classic. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-01-09 06:17 PM
ah ha, I see you already had that plot pegged out in the forum thread, Axle :D Good show. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Dozus's comment on 2014-03-02 03:10 PM
This is good stuff. By reading the multiple histories, you really get a feel for the different peoples and attitudes in the Spiked Sea. The tale of Saulke stands out to me in particular. The one thing I'd like to know more re: the Favorim is the reason for the specific measurements. They remind me the Thirty-two Excellent Signs, the external characteristics that are supposed to mark a Buddha. Those each had a specific purpose; e.g., His bodily hair grows upwards, from his having engaged in constructive practices and having inspired others to do the same. I wonder if there's a specific reason for Favorims to have such perfect measurements, or is Saulke just extraordinarily picky?

The formatting does leave something to be desired, and some of the grammar is stream-of-consciousness sloppy. But the meat is here, and it is succulent. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-05-25 06:24 PM
"You have made them a society that does not hate, or have enemies"

well I made this the view of the third author

travel from the southern Islands to the North Island is something I discuss slightly in the other posts about the area, But why do you think stone age people can't travel to distant islands? Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-02 09:49 PM
Saulke is just really picky... . Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-04 08:51 PM
Axle, I had promised to vote on this in exchange for your comment on my Fengshui (although I don't know whether you took notice or not). Anyway, finally I've finished reading this but I'm currently a bit torn over what score to give it- in particular, I'm choosing b/w 4.5 and a full score.

Onto the actual comments: I don't have any objections to the content and I love the 3 perspectives on history and esp. the opening blockquote. The idea of Warkra being a society incapable of hatred to me could possibly arise due to their living environment being resource-rich relative to their own population (prob. not the case here) or other things such as cultural belief that make them absolutely content with their current ways of life (I know, some ppl would start saying this is contrary to human nature which always chases after what it doesn't have but then in documentaries, sometimes you also see ppl living in less developed places and living a sort of hunt/forage life that are perfectly happy with their ways of living. And that's my personal take on these Warkra).

I do, however, have a slight issue with the formatting. As it currently stands, I find it ultra hard to read in one seating (and I actually read this piece bit by bit), esp. the History by Rachel 3rd. This is a length issue obviously but also, I think it will help improve the readability of the Rachel 3rd section if it was broken up a bit with blockquotes like the People's History of the Warkra Sea section. In addition, while I like the mythical feel of the tale of Saulke and Rachel's encounter with him, somewhat lacking is a more personal voice that will strengthen the atmosphere of this legendary encounter. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-04 11:03 PM
Sorry, Axle, couldn't vote full marks on this even though I was really tempted. My 5 are reserved for those that I deem perfection (i.e. wouldn't change a thing) or sweep me off my feet/keep my eyes glued at first sight. Nevertheless, this is still a high quality sub and adds great depth to the world of Decathros. In fact, now I will be eagerly following Decathros subs. Go to Comment
The Histories of the Spiked Sea
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
caesar193's comment on 2013-05-24 06:56 PM
The multiple separate histories, written by the different people, was a great method. I especially like how the difference in perspective changed from the warkra just being a pest to explaining their side.

On the subject of Warkra, I personally think that they are too innocent. You have made them a society that does not hate, or have enemies. I think that any human culture is going to have some degree of competition. And competition spawns rivalries, which spawn enemies. And, if they were living on the four small islands, they'd probably not meet the people on the northern one. But this is a detail, and I won't mark you down for it.

Other than that, it had all the classic elements of excellence: depressed gods, a hard won miracle, and islands who just hate gray hairs. Good job, Axelrowes. Go to Comment
Agar's comment on 2012-10-30 03:38 AM
A great piece of literature. Makes me want to think of the other things tank parts could be used for besides to solar sheet, and other engines for tanks, including ones run on willpower. The story definitely conveys the authors regard for his tank, and in that, the reason for their existence and proliferation. Very good work. Go to Comment
MoonHunter's comment on 2013-03-31 01:16 PM
Nicely done. Well Written. Good Visuals. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-30 09:10 AM
I can see the SBT in mymind, you've painted not just a machine (while some readers could argue that almost nothing is told about the tank itself) but the combination of history, the blending of men, machine, and a moment in history. I like the Dynastic references to Earth, hiccups in interstellar travel, and the way the SBT just feels. I am brought to think of the brutal pragmaticism of the Warhammer 40k land raiders and Leeman Russ tanks and their mass produced pre-fabricated modular layout (Book says you can built them from advanced armor composites, plain iron, or even out of pressboard and wood) as well as the ubiquitous overlooked and otherwise ignored valiant fighting tanks from Battletech like the humble Scorpion light tank or the Vedette.

Well done sir. I like the tone and the pace you set. Go to Comment
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-10-30 10:38 PM
For the first time since it rolled off of a factory line, some love for the sad and lonely Scorpion!
Go to Comment
Murometz's comment on 2012-11-09 10:35 AM
Not my cup of tea content-wise, but still found myself lost and caught up in the tale! Expertly written and presented. And what they both said! Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-30 04:47 PM
I was thinking of the Scorpion when I wrote this. Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 02:26 PM
that is really all I hope for :) Go to Comment
Kassy's comment on 2013-06-10 07:31 AM
3.5/5

Pretty much what le Muro said.

I enjoyed reading it. Go to Comment
Total Comments:
532

Join Now!!




Fatal error: Call to undefined function top_menu() in /home/strolen/public_html/lockmor/application/views/citadel/vfooter.php on line 2